Re: Your Great by scitz	31-Jul-03/8:56 AM
p.s.--great misspelling in the title!
Re: Your Great by scitz	31-Jul-03/8:54 AM
hahahahah!!! oh, yeah. you nailed it, scitz. bravo.
Re: a comment on Pencil Dust [revised] by SupremeDreamer	31-Jul-03/8:47 AM
well, then. come up and see me sometime, sailor. i likes 'em young. rar.
Re: a comment on Pencil Dust [revised] by SupremeDreamer	31-Jul-03/8:36 AM
i don't care if you don't have an 8th grade education. do you think that letters after your name is what makes you a writer? no, i didn't think you did. i'm riding your ass because you can be better. <cracks whip> and there is no such thing as a perfect beautiful masterpiece. every piece of writing, ever, was omly finished when the writer died. so keep working. and fuck being perfect. it's a lie. that is all.
Re: a comment on Pencil Dust [revised] by SupremeDreamer	31-Jul-03/8:14 AM
you pissed me off because you were writing some quality stuff, and you've been hacking your way through the last half-dozen ones you've posted. i thought you were rasing the bar, but it feels like you just got lazy. and nothing pisses me off more than somebody who can do something well that doesn't bother to. what a fucking waste.
Re: Pencil Dust [revised] by SupremeDreamer	31-Jul-03/7:40 AM
did he open his robe for you??? DID HE SHOW YOU HIS PRIVATE PARTS!!!!!????
Re: Deranged Sailor: Sea Sickness [revised] by SupremeDreamer	31-Jul-03/7:38 AM
okay, i'll complement you on the last strophe--the idea of it anyway--but why not show me instead of telling me? you know how, when you're at a family picnic, and your aunt corners you tell tell you one of her stories that goes on and on and on? well? USE SOME FRESH LANGUAGE, DAMN YOU! or you will be that aunt. even if you do have a penis. see: http://www.uni.edu/~gotera/CraftOfPoetry/imagery.html
Re: The Call Of Cannons by SupremeDreamer	31-Jul-03/7:34 AM
wow. so many metaphors, so little unity.
Re: in a singular way by daniella	30-Jul-03/8:44 PM
but, the familiar phrases in the middlw of the poem--they spoil it for me. fresh language from you, daniella! these stick: from [perhaps] whence we came. To pitch, roll and yaw. they close the books on this questions won't go away blown off course this one, you twist, to make your own: I'm afraid practice is making perfect pretences. but the others, no, they are too familiar and deaden it for me. sorry.
Re: plagiarism txt by daniella	30-Jul-03/8:02 PM
oh, dear. quickly! a glass of amarone for daniella!
Re: a comment on i will not come to bangladesh by lost in america	30-Jul-03/7:57 PM
so you say.
Re: a comment on To You, In Warmer Climes by <~>	30-Jul-03/1:49 PM
thanks, my dark secret. jump in on this one, h: http://www.absinthe-literary-review.com/sexanddeath.htm
Re: HANDRINOS IS A HUMOURLESS PRIG by walrus8	30-Jul-03/11:08 AM
a might touchy today, eh 195.157.153.253?
Re: The Longest Wait (Revised) by Caducus	30-Jul-03/7:55 AM
cad, this cuts.
Re: a comment on Sonnet for a Suicide by <~>	30-Jul-03/7:17 AM
one of my friends, the mother of the chocolate kid, found the body. i tried to write it from her POV.
Re: Middleman by INTRANSIT	30-Jul-03/6:15 AM
yes i was confusing it. this one does work nicely. very clear.
Re: Too obvious by INTRANSIT	30-Jul-03/6:14 AM
"comes usually with. After some treatments you'll look like a sith." oh, that sure is pimply, all right. but it sounds more like chronic acne!
Re: a comment on Sonnet for a Suicide by <~>	30-Jul-03/6:11 AM
i used: abcabc defdef gg. i'll call it a zzinnian sonnet. i always seem to write them in that pattern, and, not it's not english or italian.
Re: Seeing Clearly in the Dark by Jimbo	29-Jul-03/9:14 PM
but, why this awkwardness? fear, of trusting? here, this is what i mean: "Then we sang of songs Which we would rather have not"
Re: I sat for an hour to watch a spider by Jimbo	29-Jul-03/9:11 PM
i watched her, too. a few days ago. she was deft, and certain, and jerky in her haste. i could have broken her. but, as above, so below, yes? be well, thom. i go by <~> now. xo, sue.