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in a singular way (Free verse) by daniella
In a singular moment feeble light, with scarce perception, turns in upon itself by force. A zenith event rears on the horizon-- casts vacuous proportions in onto itself. It's something, in a keener sense, it's an implosion Tersely observed it will suck us into the abyss, from perhaps whence we came. To pitch, roll and yaw. later, float down trailing white the line. A first accomplished fate. When they close the books on this, the questions won't go away. They'll linger to control our bearings. I can hear it, no power now, and landing like a glider, blown off course, the main man won't give us a second try. So watch the crosswinds, not tail or head winds they are most risky at re-entry. I'm afraid practice is making perfect pretences. No matter. Sit back and count window time: the most memorable experiments of a tin-trail through a window wide-blue come through how whatever way we can in somewhat of a singular try.

Up the ladder: Third Period English
Down the ladder: never come down

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.2
Weighted score: 5.1430435
Overall Rank: 5366
Posted: March 21, 2003 7:45 PM PST; Last modified: March 21, 2003 7:45 PM PST
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[10] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 24.209.19.37 | 21-Mar-03/9:44 PM | Reply
Nice. You write like someone who has either piloted before or spent hours endlessy facinated with flight. Either way -10- in my book.
[n/a] daniella @ 200.68.200.116 > thepinkbunnyofdoom | 30-Jul-03/7:31 PM | Reply
but then again, we tend to live vicariously. in our poet's mind we have limbs to drive it home.
[6] <~> @ 64.252.48.242 | 30-Jul-03/8:44 PM | Reply
but, the familiar phrases in the middlw of the poem--they spoil it for me. fresh language from you, daniella! these stick:
from [perhaps] whence we came.
To pitch, roll and yaw.
they close the books on this
questions won't go away
blown off course

this one, you twist, to make your own:
I'm afraid practice is making perfect pretences.

but the others, no, they are too familiar and deaden it for me. sorry.
[n/a] daniella @ ::1 > <~> | 8-Oct-17/6:53 PM | Reply
are you still on poem ranker? is it dead here?
[6] <~> @ ::1 > daniella | 9-Oct-17/7:33 AM | Reply
wow. i don't think i've been here in a decade. i hope all is well with you.
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