Re: The Cheetah (dedicated to zzinnia) by Mr Pig	13-Feb-03/11:15 AM
thank you for the haiku.
Re: Positivism and Behaviourism:They Suck by razorgrin	13-Feb-03/1:02 PM
i wondered about the cat hiding in the branches, and found this strangely parallel universe, where yggdrasil is not a tree, but an institute that researches uranium: http://www.earthisland.org/yggdrasil/uep.html now my question: is the salivation due to radiation damage in the soft tissues of the mouth, or is the cat ringing a bell in the treetops as the isotope decays?
Re: Highlights From a Conversation at the Laundromat by bunniesnangels	14-Feb-03/3:47 PM
yeah. they called us 'in league with satan'! let's kick their asses! this is even worse than them saying shit about my mother! (oh, and fix the ???'s)
Re: Cupid promised me, Nadine by Shardik	14-Feb-03/3:49 PM
nice. this is the weakest line: Sipping honey tea a golden hue
Re: Confusion by bsjones84	15-Feb-03/10:35 AM
bsjones84, thank you for commentng on my poem. i am sorry you found it vulgar, and, to be quite honest, i wondered about the poem's vulgarity after you made that remark. then i went back and read it. then i read your poems. and i realized that you have very little grasp of the use of metaphor as a poetic device, and therefore, you would naturally find my writing vulgar. i invite you to reread the poem, with the understanding that there is no sex happening in that particular poem. instead, i am using the excitement one feels at the promise of imminent copulation as a device to describe the excitement that words give to me, and to him. thank you for your time, pilgrim. p.s. i have plenty of poems where sex actually does happen, and they are far from vulgar in their descriptiveness, if that's what you're looking for. words ezxcite me. what can i say?
Re: Spider Spider (A Parody in Form) by Blue Magpie	15-Feb-03/10:46 PM
yes. nicely woven. "mite" should be "might" in S1, otherwise, very pleasing.
Re: Death Of Day ( re-edit) by Mr Pig	16-Feb-03/7:51 AM
howl! bravo.
Re: Atonement by aperfecttool77	18-Feb-03/12:31 PM
i'm sorry i read this poem.
Re: The Poet by muffin	18-Feb-03/12:35 PM
part of me wants to tell you to write about your observations instead of you imaginings, but then there's another part of me that thinks you maybe should get it all out in a journal first, and then maybe go read some literature, and then some literary criticism (www.poets.org is a good source) and then, after aeons of study, and a cathartic dawn of comprehension, then, and only then, should you re-endeavor to write an poeme. and another part of me thinks i should go bowling. who will win? i dunno.
Re: she said by Bill Z Bub	18-Feb-03/3:26 PM
nice and tight, now. goodjob.
Re: The Blooding by Mr Pig	18-Feb-03/3:30 PM
things i like: cut glass accents wilder than a foxglove vivisected sky disappointemnt like a late picasso thing i don't: "always" 2 lines in a row please explain because i don't understand this line: Blurred in salt tears that burned the foxes blood,
Re: stars of wonder by rompingcat	18-Feb-03/3:31 PM
star of wonder, star of night, star with royal beauty bright, westward leading, still proceeding....
Re: Iterated Fuck by nentwined	18-Feb-03/9:23 PM
shit. i'll say. wow. that's a departure for you. a relase. or two. or 3. yessir. yes indeedy. needy. i just wished you had eased me into it more with some foreplay, instead of thrusting deftly from the outset.
Re: Perversions 6: Judgement Day by razorgrin	19-Feb-03/6:36 AM
oh shit!!!! razor, razor, razor! you have outdone yourself. thanks for making my morning!
Re: Lovers leave their marks by scitz	19-Feb-03/7:09 AM
scitz this could be quite good but you've got far too many words tumbling around in this sack. this needs a bit of meter to bounce the reader on through. smooth it out a bit, and it will be lovely. (for help with meter, see: http://www.uni.edu/english/craft/line&meter.html and http://owl.english.purdue.edu/handouts/general/gl_soundmeter.html
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Feb-03/11:00 AM
i wish i had written this.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Feb-03/11:07 AM
i wouldn't dream of it.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Feb-03/1:28 PM
roughdraft? with a butt load of potential.
Re: I did not have sexual relations with that woman by scitz	26-Feb-03/8:34 PM
sure.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Feb-03/8:36 PM
is that a tissue veil? because i have found that crenoline does a bang-up job 'down there'. stop staring.