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10-Mar-03/4:59 PM |
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absurd. an "8" worth of absurdity.
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10-Mar-03/5:04 PM |
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mmm, delicious! Like soft Belgian white chocolate dribbled over a hard slab of Schwarze Herren Schokolade.
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| Re: Cupid promised me, Nadine by Shardik |
10-Mar-03/5:43 PM |
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damn, a lurv pome that I like. Time for bed. 8
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| Re: dreams by babygurl420 |
10-Mar-03/5:49 PM |
methamphetamines burn holes in your brain.
I've heard.
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| Re: i will not come to bangladesh by lost in america |
11-Mar-03/12:02 PM |
I like this poem a whack.
and pooh-poohing lowercase is old, it is meta-stuffiness. Capitals get in the way sometimes, it's as simple as that. Words are meant to be twisted and poked and well-used and fucked with. Kind of like^H^H^H^H^H^H^H^H^H^H^H^Hwoah, CAREFUL
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11-Mar-03/1:14 PM |
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what does it mean if you like both sides?
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12-Mar-03/7:49 AM |
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| Re: just as we were by daniella |
12-Mar-03/11:34 AM |
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mmm, yummy. This is one of the few poems I've ever read which made me wish there was a version on video.
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| Re: yellow verse by daniella |
12-Mar-03/11:43 AM |
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nifty! (add "madly" to line 2 'n' it'd scan better)
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| Re: draft by daniella |
12-Mar-03/11:47 AM |
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Oh, I like this. This is how I often feel about words, I feel like I want to punish the actual words themselves as if they had some punishable sentience.
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12-Mar-03/11:50 AM |
god'swife's words are lovely and dark
and I just know it would be such a lark
with a switch and some twine
and one really good line
to meet her alone in a park
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| Re: Waiting by Luv2write |
12-Mar-03/12:18 PM |
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is your name Maud? just curious. Lynn?
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| Re: Olden by smlink84 |
12-Mar-03/12:47 PM |
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vibrates between brilliance and pat nonsense rhymes like a schizophrenic man rapping. The last lines made me shiver, and I thought carcus must be some ancient obscure mythical boat. But a lot of googling reveals only mispellings of carcass.
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| Re: esopus creek by unknown |
12-Mar-03/1:16 PM |
This poem fucking rocks. Oh wow. I grew up with such country in my backyard 'n' much time alone in it. nosTALgia, it's such a great drug.
Although I suppose DA has a point. I'd say lurking instead of wriggling, but only because I'm a melodramatic fool. "still trying to reach up" could just be "still reaching" ??? I dunno. But I really like this poem, even if those really are flaws.
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| Re: The Wooden Armchair Of Similar Dreams by Caducus |
12-Mar-03/1:39 PM |
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I liked this poem a lot but I sheepishly confess I'm still trying to puzzle out the meaning of the last stanza. Can I get a hint?
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| Re: Live by Luv2write |
12-Mar-03/1:52 PM |
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hmmm, what will you be thinking, while you're squirming around inside the scapegoat christ, about the 95% of humans who ever lived that your god is torturing for no other reason than that they didn't dedicate their lives to satisfying his narcissism? Numbers 31, that's who you serve.
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| Re: Remember-me (an ode to those dropped off at the clinic) by Bachus |
12-Mar-03/3:47 PM |
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was bare bare instead of bear on purpose, or a typo? I hope on purpose, it made me laugh.
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12-Mar-03/4:51 PM |
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| Re: March by <~> |
12-Mar-03/5:47 PM |
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| Re: i will not come to bangladesh by lost in america |
13-Mar-03/5:59 AM |
it's a great poem but I still have to limerick you:
I think "lost in america"'s lost
and would be wheree'r he was tossed
he skipped Bangledesh
and some chick's willing flesh
because of the cultural cost.
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