| Re: Fate by Dostoyevsky |
13-Mar-03/6:08 AM |
jingle jangle, words to mangle
hist'ry with my shit be-spangle
fate really doesn't give a fuck
'bout anything, it's all just luck
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| Re: What Have You Swallowed by Fear of Garbage |
13-Mar-03/6:47 AM |
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intricate and fractal. perhaps one day you can tell me what it means, for now I am content to turn it over and over in my hands and puzzle, watching for the light glinting off elusive facets.
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| Re: Assassin Nation by Blue Magpie |
13-Mar-03/6:54 AM |
bah
the universe couldn't care less
whether we oppress or progress or transgress
but with every breath
it is only to death
it demands that we all acquiesce
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
13-Mar-03/7:27 AM |
brilliant.
oh fucking brilliant.
jesus, this thing is a fucking neckers cube in words, baby.
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| Re: Dust by Caducus |
13-Mar-03/7:31 AM |
very nice, first stanza rocks & the yourself more self repetition is brill.
pickety-snickety: should in the quill not be with the quill?
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| Re: The Courtesan by horus8 |
13-Mar-03/7:40 AM |
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13-Mar-03/9:32 AM |
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13-Mar-03/9:34 AM |
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13-Mar-03/9:35 AM |
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doesn't work for me at all. Sorry, because you wrote dead boy and that haiku which were frikkin' excellent you must be punished for this one
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13-Mar-03/9:38 AM |
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Apparently, pomeranker, in various states of decay.
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| Re: The Bloody War Of Angels by Caducus |
13-Mar-03/9:52 AM |
sweet
s/there/their/ in stanza 3 line 3 before pk gets here and craps
my nitpicks: stanza 2 line 1 bugs me because its awkward. why not just something like angels trick the cherubs into killing the stars. or angels corrupt the cherubs and they start killing stars. or something.
and stanza 4 line 1. The rest of the poem is startlingly original, making "eyes bleed black" stand out for it's familiarity.
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| Re: advice for the heated by <~> |
13-Mar-03/10:16 AM |
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| Re: Harry Potter and the philosophers stone by ==Doylum |
13-Mar-03/10:24 AM |
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one 9 worth of delicious absurdity.
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| Re: UNTITLED by bxjay170 |
13-Mar-03/10:26 AM |
definitely needs a limerick:
bxjay shouts over a moan
'bout how much he feels all alone
if he "seattled" his soul
he'd get out of his hole
and so, to the west coast he's flown
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| Re: oedipus is raising a pint to me now by <~> |
13-Mar-03/1:00 PM |
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| Re: hard as a rock by <~> |
13-Mar-03/2:06 PM |
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luscious and lascivious. I read it in all the wrong ways (I know a little bit about those Mayans)
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| Re: Perversions 6: Judgement Day by razorgrin |
13-Mar-03/4:32 PM |
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Most excellent limerickizationalism.
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| Re: My friend by Luv2write |
13-Mar-03/4:35 PM |
This poem is cool, it's exactly the same if you read it backwards as when you read it frontwards.
How'd you do that?
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
14-Mar-03/4:07 AM |
erm, feeling alienated hardly qualifies one as being unique in all respects on THIS website.
I think the last line should be:
"I'm choking on the fog of despair as it wells insidiously up from my inner being like a miasma of hopelessness"
just a comment.
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| Re: A Vietnam Homecoming by scitz |
14-Mar-03/6:10 AM |
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are you sure you didn't mean "to move forward / we must MOVE our behind" ???
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