on hard as a rock by <~>
13 Mar 2003, 2:06 PM
luscious and lascivious. I read it in all the wrong ways (I know a little bit about those Mayans)
on The Courtesan by horus8
13 Mar 2003, 7:40 AM
softy. sniff.
on some deleted poem
14 Mar 2003, 4:07 AM
erm, feeling alienated hardly qualifies one as being unique in all respects on THIS website.
I think the last line should be:
"I'm choking on the fog of despair as it wells insidiously up from my inner being like a miasma of hopelessness"
just a comment.
I think the last line should be:
"I'm choking on the fog of despair as it wells insidiously up from my inner being like a miasma of hopelessness"
just a comment.
on A Vietnam Homecoming by scitz
14 Mar 2003, 6:10 AM
are you sure you didn't mean "to move forward / we must MOVE our behind" ???
on Perversions 6: Judgement Day by razorgrin
13 Mar 2003, 4:32 PM
Most excellent limerickizationalism.
on oedipus is raising a pint to me now by <~>
13 Mar 2003, 1:00 PM
ha, very clever.
on What Have You Swallowed by Fear of Garbage
13 Mar 2003, 6:47 AM
intricate and fractal. perhaps one day you can tell me what it means, for now I am content to turn it over and over in my hands and puzzle, watching for the light glinting off elusive facets.
on Assassin Nation by Blue Magpie
13 Mar 2003, 6:54 AM
bah
the universe couldn't care less
whether we oppress or progress or transgress
but with every breath
it is only to death
it demands that we all acquiesce
the universe couldn't care less
whether we oppress or progress or transgress
but with every breath
it is only to death
it demands that we all acquiesce
on some deleted poem
13 Mar 2003, 7:27 AM
brilliant.
oh fucking brilliant.
jesus, this thing is a fucking neckers cube in words, baby.
oh fucking brilliant.
jesus, this thing is a fucking neckers cube in words, baby.
on some deleted poem
13 Mar 2003, 9:32 AM
uhn. Nice. I'm Reeling.
on some deleted poem
13 Mar 2003, 9:34 AM
buddaboom
on some deleted poem
13 Mar 2003, 9:35 AM
doesn't work for me at all. Sorry, because you wrote dead boy and that haiku which were frikkin' excellent you must be punished for this one
on some deleted poem
13 Mar 2003, 9:38 AM
Apparently, pomeranker, in various states of decay.
on The Bloody War Of Angels by Caducus
13 Mar 2003, 9:52 AM
sweet
s/there/their/ in stanza 3 line 3 before pk gets here and craps
my nitpicks: stanza 2 line 1 bugs me because its awkward. why not just something like angels trick the cherubs into killing the stars. or angels corrupt the cherubs and they start killing stars. or something.
and stanza 4 line 1. The rest of the poem is startlingly original, making "eyes bleed black" stand out for it's familiarity.
s/there/their/ in stanza 3 line 3 before pk gets here and craps
my nitpicks: stanza 2 line 1 bugs me because its awkward. why not just something like angels trick the cherubs into killing the stars. or angels corrupt the cherubs and they start killing stars. or something.
and stanza 4 line 1. The rest of the poem is startlingly original, making "eyes bleed black" stand out for it's familiarity.
on advice for the heated by <~>
13 Mar 2003, 10:16 AM
oh you voyeur you
on Harry Potter and the philosophers stone by ==Doylum
13 Mar 2003, 10:24 AM
one 9 worth of delicious absurdity.
on Fate by Dostoyevsky
13 Mar 2003, 6:08 AM
jingle jangle, words to mangle
hist'ry with my shit be-spangle
fate really doesn't give a fuck
'bout anything, it's all just luck
hist'ry with my shit be-spangle
fate really doesn't give a fuck
'bout anything, it's all just luck