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UNTITLED (Other) by bxjay170
BEHIND A DARK SHADED SHADOW, SCARED TO COME OUT TO THE REAL WORLD. LIVING AND DEPENDING ON DISTANT DREAMS, HE BELIEVES HIS GOING TO MAKE IT EVEN IF HE'S FALLING INTO A DEEPER HOLE. STRUGGLES JUST TO MAINTAIN HIS UNSEATTLED SOUL, HE PUTS HIS HEAD DOWN AT NIGHT AND DOESNT EVEN KNOW WHY HE'S IN THIS WORLD FOR. CRAZY THOUGHTS CIRLCLE AROUND HIS HEAD SHOULD HE BE ALIVE OR DEAD OR IS THERE SOMETHING MORE TO GAIN THROUGH HIS PAIN I WONDER WHY IS IT THAT SO MANY INDIVIDUALS ARE SCARED TO BE DIFFERENT, ISOLATING THOSE WHO C LIKE ME, YET AM EVERYTHING U WONNA BE

Up the ladder: smiles from heaven
Down the ladder: Triptych: Rural

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.6666665
Weighted score: 5.1986713
Overall Rank: 4561
Posted: March 13, 2003 9:34 AM PST; Last modified: March 13, 2003 9:34 AM PST
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[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.8.96 | 13-Mar-03/10:26 AM | Reply
BEFORE YOU CONSIDER WRITING POETRY, TRY MASTERING THE ABILITY TO MASTER THE ABILITY TO WRITE COHERENT SENTENCES IN PLAIN ENGLISH. BECAUSE IF WE CAN'T EVEN DO THAT RIGHT, HOW CAN WE POSSIBLY HOPE TO TACKLE THE PROBLEM OF INFLATION? HOW CAN WE SOLVE EDUCATION? AND HOW CAN WE EVEN BEGIN TO DEAL WITH THE "COULDN'T CARE LESS" ATTITUDE THAT IS SO DEEPLY ROOTED IN THE FABRIC OF MODERN SOCIETY? I DON'T PRETEND TO HAVE ALL THE ANSWERS. I DON'T EVEN PRETEND TO WEAR UNDERPANTS.

DO YOU?
[n/a] lastobelus @ 213.61.217.3 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 13-Mar-03/10:27 AM | Reply
ARE YOU INVERTING YOUR VOTING AGAIN? YOU FUCKER.
[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.8.96 > lastobelus | 13-Mar-03/10:29 AM | Reply
are you SUBverting YOUR voting?
[n/a] lastobelus @ 213.61.217.3 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 13-Mar-03/10:45 AM | Reply
what the hell is that supposed to mean? I actually didn't vote on this pome, just used it to stroke my limerick bone. Because I'm sarcastic I'm also alone, but I don't shout, whine, promulgate depression or moan.
[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.8.96 > lastobelus | 13-Mar-03/10:49 AM | Reply
what the hell is that DISposed to mean?
[n/a] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 13-Mar-03/12:02 PM | Reply
what are these "underpants"?
please tell me, that i might partake in them.
many thanks, z
[n/a] lastobelus @ 217.82.2.223 > <~> | 13-Mar-03/12:23 PM | Reply
stay away from my underpants, girl
lest you end like the last little pearl
she made her survey
but was frightened away
by the man-thing she caused to unfurl
[n/a] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 > lastobelus | 13-Mar-03/12:31 PM | Reply
sirrah! beest thou so bold in such an publicke forum? unhand me, i say! as i have unhanded thee!
[n/a] lastobelus @ 213.61.217.3 | 13-Mar-03/10:26 AM | Reply
definitely needs a limerick:

bxjay shouts over a moan
'bout how much he feels all alone
if he "seattled" his soul
he'd get out of his hole
and so, to the west coast he's flown

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