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The Bloody War Of Angels (Free verse) by Caducus
Sodom fornicates with courtesan's on the Dead Sea Scrolls,
Michael watches through moist oval velvet these forbidden desires,.
Satan manicures his hooves whilst reading Corinthians,
While God still tries to create mankind into Messiahs.
Angels corrupt the cherubs into disposing of stars,
They take the Plough and hurl it in to Mars.
Satan orbits Saturn,
Adding 6 more rings to his most beautiful planet,
While God was away perfecting Earth and peace,
Devils were at play in the abyss.
The Fanged cherubs rid the sky of all stars,
And the carnal demons of nocturne come hungry,
Devouring there very creators,
Deflowering the virgins of God.
They have come to take us.
And my eyes bleed black from sights of pleasure,
My face licked by forked hissing tongues.
The sky is lacerated by Raphael's feather,
And God is too busy to notice,
He's listening to love songs.
Satan and St Michael shake hands and conspire,
As God engulfs in a rage of fire,
And Gods bastardized mortals embrace the darkness,
That for so long they were denied,
The last sentinel relinquishes their vigil of tedium
And souls become unpurified by each and every one of them,
Mortals and Demons writhe naked,
eating grenache on the tablets of the covenant,
And everyone is fat on sin,
Everyone is sexual,
Skin into skin,
The Lord Of Darkness addresses the nation,
And says unto us all,
LET THE GOOD TIMES BEGIN !
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Weighted score: 6.1101027
Overall Rank: 1124
Posted: March 13, 2003 9:35 AM PST; Last modified: March 13, 2003 9:49 AM PST
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s/there/their/ in stanza 3 line 3 before pk gets here and craps
my nitpicks: stanza 2 line 1 bugs me because its awkward. why not just something like angels trick the cherubs into killing the stars. or angels corrupt the cherubs and they start killing stars. or something.
and stanza 4 line 1. The rest of the poem is startlingly original, making "eyes bleed black" stand out for it's familiarity.