| Re: a comment on Rough Translation (Prose) by William Alfaro |
9-Mar-05/11:32 PM |
I'd guess it'd be someone with a major crush on me(We both know who that might be, if not look up). I haven't been on here much these days. I come back and I'm Number 1. Now I'm like 2, as of yesterday. I'm actually getting annoyed over some of this. First what are semi sweet, but really alittle annoying so I don't tend to vote on them. I don't want to hear someone else reconstruct my words to display feeling of a crush.
<3 Jason
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| Re: a comment on Snow Sucks by JoyLuck |
9-Mar-05/11:21 PM |
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Or could it be that I see writing in a manner that paints a picture in your mind, that couldn't be created on a canvas, as Poetry.
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| Re: a comment on wishes by the_poetess |
9-Mar-05/11:15 PM |
You may and its more like I'm much more practiced in typos and idealism writer/reader. I'm Buddhist. I've made similar typos, and I'm a semi-arrogant person.
<3 Jason
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| Re: wishes by the_poetess |
8-Mar-05/10:12 PM |
I've read everything you've written up to date, and found two things. A) You need to use spell check. I tend to overlook a typo here or there(I mean come on they happen) but for the love of Buddha, save us the eyes strain. B) You can't be out of high school yet, are you? Your writting has the arrogant tone of someone who thinks they are a genius, but is still being taught. I'm guessing that you tend to read the materials during class, but fail to do the homework more often than not.
This is by far the most poetic (and best)thing you've written to date. -8-
<3 Jason
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| Re: A Nation by the_poetess |
8-Mar-05/9:58 PM |
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lol, America coming undone? I like how you started this, but it was too long and detailed and I believe you lost your own point along the way. -7- Because there was some thought and attempts at being poetic here, but mainly because you did some of your homework. But mostly this comes off as the rantings of someone who thinks they understand whats going on in life, but in all actually doesn't.
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| Re: genious by the_poetess |
8-Mar-05/9:35 PM |
Genius, I believe the word you want is Genius, and I wouldn't call myself one until I could at least spell it. Yea... people do worry about saving the world. I imagine them to be able write with better depth than this though. You have the potential, if you trimmed what you had and fleshed it out properly to have a nice piece here. But as it is, its crap. I do however like the underlying Arrogant tone to this though. -3-
<3 Jason
P.S. You won't make many friend is life by dropping zeros on people and not at least leaving a reason why you thought the piece in question sucked.
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| Re: Snow Sucks by JoyLuck |
8-Mar-05/9:08 PM |
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I love how all is by itself. -7-
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| Re: a comment on Snow Sucks by JoyLuck |
8-Mar-05/9:07 PM |
I have to disagree with you there. You forgot that poetry is an art form, and as such should have so artistic value to it. Poets are painter who use words as their canvas. This is a however painting with words. Thats why its a poem.
<3 Jason
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| Re: Attention: Superman's Coffee Break is From 1:35 to 1:37 by MacFrantic |
8-Mar-05/9:03 PM |
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| Re: a comment on Rough Translation (Prose) by William Alfaro |
8-Mar-05/9:00 PM |
Not really actually. I prefer to be ranked where I should be ranked. Not that seeing my name in the top 20 isn't nice and all, I'd like to think that I made it there on my own merits.
<3 Jason
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| Re: a comment on James The Dashing Pirate by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
8-Mar-05/8:54 PM |
You rate me a 6? On the right track? Look at the list of things I have written compared to you. In fact look at my first poem, a lyric called Idiot Box. Until your poems are at least of that caliber(Which isn't that high really) I'd prefer you never rate my words again.
<3 Jason
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| Re: Disfigure by DevilBuni |
8-Mar-05/8:47 PM |
Good sentiment, but it needs fleshed out. Nice name by the way. -7-
<3 Jason
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| Re: eat what you want. by burgerking33 |
8-Mar-05/8:43 PM |
And you bother to write poetry because? Your sister dared you? You thought that somehow you'd develop a skill for it that no knew you possed? Or you were way too bored?
Whatever the reason, stop. Your not good at it, and if think this is good than I pity you, and say, read some lyrics from the music you listen to. Because if you at least read the words of people using things like similes, and metaphors, you might actually have come here with something better that looks like a poem. -0- I see no artistic value in this what so ever. Much less your praising yourself before anyone else read your words(All though whether you knew it or not at the time it was smart, because I doubt mainy other people will).
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| Re: a comment on Today, last year was on a Sunday by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
8-Mar-05/8:31 PM |
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No Idea. They're profile from (I think its)frostclouds.com says they live in Connecticut.
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| Re: Fat girls Who Wear Short Skirts During Winter Quarter by DurtKL |
8-Mar-05/2:37 PM |
Whats sad is its true, but funny none the less, welcome back.
<3 Jason
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| Re: So I Hear by Vince Dolamando |
5-Mar-05/2:12 AM |
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"to quit" not "to quite". Other than that, ace. -8-
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| Re: a comment on Dancing on Glass by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
28-Feb-05/8:23 PM |
Depends on whom is getting ready, and what they are preparing for.
<3 Jason
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| Re: Ode by James Rykelangeli |
27-Feb-05/8:07 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Dancing on Glass by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
27-Feb-05/8:02 AM |
What can I say to that other than pratice makes perfect.
<3 Jason
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| Re: a comment on My word, her word, and yours by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
24-Feb-05/10:57 AM |
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Yeah, the entire second stanza is great.
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