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genious (Free verse) by the_poetess Sometimes I wonder
how it is that I live with myself
with what I know to be my selfishness and my greed
I wonder why I'm not doing more for society
why I sit back and enjoy myself
knowing that others are suffering
I wonder why I'm not doing more
to enlighten my neighbors
not doing more to make my friends realize
that nothing is as bad as it can be
it's not easy giving back
it's not easy striking the balance between enjoying what has been given
to you
and saving the world
I know I am failing
falling back to the ease
I was born with, ignoring
the insight that I have been granted
ignoring my only known gift
how many others grapple
with these kinds of questions
how many others stay up at night fretting
over the fate of the world
how many others?
because all this would be so much easier
if I werent alone
how many others?
because all this would be so much easier
if I knew that I wasn't crazy
but I probably am,
it probably isn't a bad thing
lonliness is most likely my sacrafice to society
and I can see it, I can see myself
a bitter unhappy genious
misunderstood, frustrated,
seeing things all else refuse to see
I can see this and it scares me,
I don't want that,
so I wonder how commited I really am
to this saving the world thing,
so I wonder if all my compassion
isn't just cold, empty and fake.
Up the ladder:
Us
Down the ladder:
Snow
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Posted: March 8, 2005 6:49 PM PST; Last modified: March 8, 2005 6:49 PM PSTWeighted score: 4.462117 Overall Rank: 12873 Comments:
Genius, I believe the word you want is Genius, and I wouldn't call myself one until I could at least spell it. Yea... people do worry about saving the world. I imagine them to be able write with better depth than this though. You have the potential, if you trimmed what you had and fleshed it out properly to have a nice piece here. But as it is, its crap. I do however like the underlying Arrogant tone to this though. -3-
<3 Jason P.S. You won't make many friend is life by dropping zeros on people and not at least leaving a reason why you thought the piece in question sucked.
sometimes i dont like a piece of poetry but I dont feel like being rude --if i know is that i dont like it but i really have nothing constructive to say - is it not better to say nothing at all
and i dont honestly think i am a genius, but we all have our delusional moments dont we, those times when you really think you are onto something, but then you wake up the next morning and realize not only has that theme been played out 1001 times over, but that you're also an ass at least ive had days like this, regardless - you were right in thinking that it did have a touch of arrogance - i was going for that - not because i really am one - because all of those "martyrs" that are wondering around today piss me off - who needs another martry one third of the world already has one, and the rest obviously dont need one -emili
While it's a sentiment that wouldn't hurt to cram into a daily "why am I?" session, this talked about the situation from outside of it too much; make me feel how this thought applies directly to your life--grip me with context, colors, sights, smells, tastes...
you make a compelling point - that is something i am having trouble with - you could say i am a brain, you know, i live in my head to much, and often the details of the outer world just slip me by........im working on it though..........thankyou for being contructive without being rude
-emili
Genius is misspelled.
thankyou
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-emili