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genious

Member since 2005 · Posted 8 Mar 2005 · 11 comments

Sometimes I wonder how it is that I live with myself with what I know to be my selfishness and my greed I wonder why I'm not doing more for society why I sit back and enjoy myself knowing that others are suffering I wonder why I'm not doing more to enlighten my neighbors not doing more to make my friends realize that nothing is as bad as it can be it's not easy giving back it's not easy striking the balance between enjoying what has been given to you and saving the world I know I am failing falling back to the ease I was born with, ignoring the insight that I have been granted ignoring my only known gift how many others grapple with these kinds of questions how many others stay up at night fretting over the fate of the world how many others? because all this would be so much easier if I werent alone how many others? because all this would be so much easier if I knew that I wasn't crazy but I probably am, it probably isn't a bad thing lonliness is most likely my sacrafice to society and I can see it, I can see myself a bitter unhappy genious misunderstood, frustrated, seeing things all else refuse to see I can see this and it scares me, I don't want that, so I wonder how commited I really am to this saving the world thing, so I wonder if all my compassion isn't just cold, empty and fake.

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[2] INTRANSIT 8-Mar-05/7:23 PM Reply

Are you a Saggitarius?

[3] nentwined › INTRANSIT 9-Mar-05/1:49 PM Reply

_I_ am... What are you implying? :P

[2] INTRANSIT › nentwined 9-Mar-05/2:09 PM Reply

Us -truth seekers-, sometimes we run into a problem with our poetry when we want to say something and the urge to just ,um, archer?- the point overrides the tools used to create poetry. I find myself forcing obfuscation and declarification to "hide" what I'm saying and It's a Royal Paine-Diaz sometimes. Do you agree?

[3] nentwined › INTRANSIT 9-Mar-05/2:40 PM Reply

Utterly. :)

[n/a] the_poetess › INTRANSIT 9-Mar-05/2:48 PM Reply

no actually, i am a gemini
-emili

[3] thepinkbunnyofdoom 8-Mar-05/9:35 PM Reply

Genius, I believe the word you want is Genius, and I wouldn't call myself one until I could at least spell it. Yea... people do worry about saving the world. I imagine them to be able write with better depth than this though. You have the potential, if you trimmed what you had and fleshed it out properly to have a nice piece here. But as it is, its crap. I do however like the underlying Arrogant tone to this though. -3-

<3 Jason

P.S. You won't make many friend is life by dropping zeros on people and not at least leaving a reason why you thought the piece in question sucked.

[n/a] the_poetess › thepinkbunnyofdoom 9-Mar-05/2:52 PM Reply

sometimes i dont like a piece of poetry but I dont feel like being rude --if i know is that i dont like it but i really have nothing constructive to say - is it not better to say nothing at all

and i dont honestly think i am a genius, but we all have our delusional moments dont we, those times when you really think you are onto something, but then you wake up the next morning and realize not only has that theme been played out 1001 times over, but that you're also an ass

at least ive had days like this, regardless - you were right in thinking that it did have a touch of arrogance - i was going for that - not because i really am one - because all of those "martyrs" that are wondering around today piss me off - who needs another martry one third of the world already has one, and the rest obviously dont need one

-emili

[3] nentwined 9-Mar-05/1:53 PM Reply

While it's a sentiment that wouldn't hurt to cram into a daily "why am I?" session, this talked about the situation from outside of it too much; make me feel how this thought applies directly to your life--grip me with context, colors, sights, smells, tastes...

[n/a] the_poetess › nentwined 9-Mar-05/2:53 PM Reply

you make a compelling point - that is something i am having trouble with - you could say i am a brain, you know, i live in my head to much, and often the details of the outer world just slip me by........im working on it though..........thankyou for being contructive without being rude

-emili

[6] zodiac 11-Mar-05/9:46 PM Reply

Genius is misspelled.

[n/a] the_poetess › zodiac 2-Apr-05/12:13 PM Reply

thankyou