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eat what you want. (Free verse) by burgerking33
come on now, grab that burger. you know you want to. take your diet and shove it up your yeah thats it, grasp them fries. don't be a wuss! take your conscience and shove it up your oh yeah, pick up that shake you rookie, you. see those people over there? ram one right up their you eat that burger king, girl and you be proud. because nobody can make you feel less than them. hold that head up high. you go, girl.

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.5
Weighted score: 5.75
Overall Rank: 1794
Posted: March 8, 2005 3:13 PM PST; Last modified: March 8, 2005 3:13 PM PST
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[n/a] burgerking33 @ | 8-Mar-05/3:14 PM | Reply
great job a beautiful poem and well written. well done.
[0] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ | 8-Mar-05/8:43 PM | Reply
And you bother to write poetry because? Your sister dared you? You thought that somehow you'd develop a skill for it that no knew you possed? Or you were way too bored?

Whatever the reason, stop. Your not good at it, and if think this is good than I pity you, and say, read some lyrics from the music you listen to. Because if you at least read the words of people using things like similes, and metaphors, you might actually have come here with something better that looks like a poem. -0- I see no artistic value in this what so ever. Much less your praising yourself before anyone else read your words(All though whether you knew it or not at the time it was smart, because I doubt mainy other people will).
[n/a] edpeterson @ > thepinkbunnyofdoom | 9-Mar-05/7:28 AM | Reply
do you think that the poems written by CLS are good?
[10] Dan garcia-Black @ | 9-Mar-05/5:02 AM | Reply
Nice, tight, little rant. Good diet, too. If you shove all that stuff up your... It never gets into your blood stream to clog your arteries.
[n/a] edpeterson @ | 9-Mar-05/7:29 AM | Reply
NO! Don't eat that burger, Don't eat that ice cream!

Give it to me!
[9] INTRANSIT @ | 9-Mar-05/1:02 PM | Reply
burger, fries, shake, should all be the las words in each stanza. Put THAT in your cherry pie.
[8] oneglove @ | 4-Aug-06/6:44 AM | Reply
go on girl, i like reading this in a whispery voice like i'm in nkotb
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