| Re: a comment on pihsdneirf ruo fo dne eht(The Burn) by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
20-Mar-05/10:08 AM |
lol. No, Angels and Demons was a good read but tedious, to pick back up again(It took me a month to sit down and finish it), so I decided against The Da Vinci Code, despite Dan Brown's great crafting of factual fictions.
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| Re: a comment on The Sidekick Retires From Fairview's Finest by luzrheroguy |
19-Mar-05/11:54 PM |
Yeah, I just thought I'd let you know that luzrheroguy is my user name as well. I'm mainly leaving myself the breadcrumbs of copyrighted intellectual property for my super hero satire of sorts.
<3 Jason
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| Re: a comment on Sophia, Lets get this over with by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
19-Mar-05/7:55 PM |
Its written from the perspective of one of the character's in one of the short stories I'm writing. Glad you liked it.
<3 Jason
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| Re: WHY DAD?WHY? by RION12 |
19-Mar-05/7:44 PM |
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I'm normally all about the emotional poems, but honestly? If this was pimple I might have cut you enough slack to give this a 5. As is, a 2. All you've done is bitch at someone whom I seriously doubt will read this. The rest of us, don't need to see this.
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| Re: a comment on pihsdneirf ruo fo dne eht(The Burn) by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
19-Mar-05/7:36 PM |
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lol, don't worry about that. Click the best Tab sometime.
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| Re: No wonder I can't sleep when you are gone, but still here. by Haleyj |
19-Mar-05/7:31 PM |
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Few typos, this is more "pimple" than "freeverse", and inside/mind. -6-
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| Re: Zin/Enough/Things/Squeeze/Flow by gregsamsa222 |
19-Mar-05/8:18 AM |
As I'm sure you've been told, this is god aweful long.
Each of these poems are great. I love the images and the way that you have painted with the canvas of my heart.
If these poems wouldn't all have had worked together, exactly the way they do, my vote would have been a 5(one for each poem here), just for being so long. But as is, 10. Excellent writing.
<3 Jason
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| Re: The Ususal Love Stuff by Dreammaker1024 |
19-Mar-05/6:19 AM |
This is prose, and while wordy, you touch on good points of introspection. -7-
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| Re: a comment on JJâs Church by Dovina |
17-Mar-05/5:24 PM |
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| Re: a comment on JJâs Church by Dovina |
17-Mar-05/5:22 PM |
Actually, she said "pretzels or breadsticks", which unless you count breadsticks and pretzels as the same thing. Which, unless I'm seriously more dim than even I imagined, they are not.
<3 Jason
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| Re: Knowledge by the_poetess |
17-Mar-05/3:11 PM |
I know things now,
now I can't be a believer,
now I can't look at the sky without crying,
can't look at the stars without mourning the loss of my ancestors.
Lose it, and use shoes to carry you to a close as it were. You had me until that verse. Try using your words to sculpt an image that says what you mean here, without being tediously long, or losing meaning. An improvement by FAR from the last time I read on of yours. -7-. Everything else works fairly well.
<3 Jason
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| Re: a comment on JJâs Church by Dovina |
17-Mar-05/3:00 PM |
I love how you avoided the question by giving an open ended answer to a closed question. "I asked what you used as subtitutionary bread", not, what the substitutionary bread ment. lol. I have been a humble patron to both churches, and a bars.
"for perhaps the last supper.
And I, the only parishioner"
Vague, but its there. Your questioning death was the key reason I love this. It fit perfect. Some more images of perhaps, a confessional of some sort(Karoke), stained glass windows(Only think dirty or broken window), and an offering plate(Tip cup maybe), would be easily inserted, and play up the comparison a bit more.
<3 Jason
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| Re: JJâs Church by Dovina |
16-Mar-05/10:58 AM |
What are you using as "substitutionary bread" in a bar? Pretzels?
Other than that(My own silly curious nature), good comparison.
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| Re: a comment on The Measurement by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
16-Mar-05/10:19 AM |
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Think pool, and a pool shark.
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| Re: a comment on Girl of my Dreams??? by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
12-Mar-05/11:18 PM |
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Actually this is about one of my little sister's friends hitting on me.
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| Re: a comment on Snow Sucks by JoyLuck |
12-Mar-05/1:22 AM |
Look close. All is alone yet together. Where as the rest of the message is broken and scattered. Accidental or no, I see the ALL, being together but alone, as artistic. The majority of the letters are scattered across the page, brought together by a mental zig zaging connection. Its individualism yet connection to the other letters, is what in my mind, is so poetic about it.
<3 Jason
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| Re: a comment on To those that would teach poetry by INTRANSIT |
11-Mar-05/4:13 PM |
That I would make for you something, you will use to judge me later(Still refering to the poem writing). The gun itself is used as a Judgement(I.E. Grades).
Unless I misunderstand entirely.
<3 Jason
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| Re: a comment on To those that would teach poetry by INTRANSIT |
11-Mar-05/4:08 PM |
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Its good because of more than just that. Look carefully, its actually quite a bold and beautiful statement.
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| Re: The 8th Day by whispern_smoke_wisp |
11-Mar-05/3:53 PM |
Well they're going to kill me for revealing this but... Yes there is an 8th day. The thing is, its not a day with a night, and nice round even numbers. Haven't you ever noticed the extra hours that just seem to have slipped themselves between minutes. Those are the 8th day.
<3 Jason
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| Re: an unbiased voice (or the most biased one you'll hear) by i_am_the_popsicle |
11-Mar-05/3:34 PM |
Nice Bias, way to go you with eveness and balance. Now, do us all a favor, and add a few more points to your overall score by proof reading before you post. I didn't catch any spelling errors, but a crapload of inproper tense, and other bits that I had to decipher the lay of the text before they made sense. They really hurt this.
<3 Jason -7-
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