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The Sidekick Retires From Fairview's Finest (Free verse) by luzrheroguy
My best was never enough
Against you at your worst
I'm always a close second
Compared to your first
This is getting old and I'm getting so tired
Of watching you take your trophy
When you know that
In the morning
It won't mean anything
Don't you think that its funny
How I taught you your style and grace
And how hair could be the perfect accent to a face
The truth is heart breaker, I helped make you
Its at times like this I can't help but wonder
What have I done?
I can't hate you, but at times I long to
Did you forget what I have given you
Have you forgotten
The burdens I've carried for you
Or the long shots I took
Just to keep you breathing
Now I find myself
Believing... That maybe...
I might have been wrong
I see what you do and don't I agree
You're the talk of the town
When they see me, you're always around
You play off my clever lines, and heart felt words
Just to get what you feel, you deserve
Sometimes I wonder
What you think,
I deserve
I never had a problem with sharing
You should know that better than anyone
But you can't take from me everything
And leave me with nothing
Thats what I call theft
The day I woke up with nothing left
You'd robbed yourself
Of my company
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Arithmetic Mean: 7.8
Weighted score: 6.4
Overall Rank: 784
Posted: March 19, 2005 6:45 PM PST; Last modified: March 19, 2005 6:45 PM PST
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"My best was never enough
Against you at your worst
I'm always a close second
Compared to your first"
I like how it rhymes just here and there without sounding fake or funky. It sounds like it just flowed out that way.
<3 Jason
It's weird (maybe that's not the right word), but I am naturally attracted to your poetry. I didn't even know this poem was by you, but I was drawn to the poem and then drawn into the poem.
I like your way of writing. (I have a confession to make --- I have been reading a lot of your poems, although I didn't vote on them. I should have.)
There is a definite authenticity about how you write that is very attractive, like you are baring yourself, baring your journal for people to read, only it rhymes and it's VERY good.
Anyway, I am definitely drawn to your writings, as are others. Don't stop. It's a gift...... juli harrelson :)
Have no fear. My gift won't go wasted. I have youth on my side.
<3 Jason