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wishes (Free verse) by the_poetess the cockaigne dream feels cold and empty
like a stale chocolate bar
at 2:00 in the morning
it just dissaponts me
reality isn't a dark chocolate truffle
I wish it was because
my acedia is overwhelming
how long can the world stay
a small quivering mouse
all shades of gray
and how long must I wait
for the peacock to show me his colorful feathers
on NBC television
it's always the same old pabulum isn't it,
always safe,
always sane
but I'm yearning for something crazy and dangerous
why can't I jump off the bridge
without drowning
why can't I run through the street
without getting hit by a car
who understands that somebody somewhere
just realized that this is their last
moment on earth
just realized that they are going to die
tears well in their eyes as they desperatley
think it's not fair
and it isn't
but what does that matter
Up the ladder:
Depth of Illusion
Down the ladder:
Smelly Scum Child.
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Posted: March 7, 2005 6:27 PM PST; Last modified: March 7, 2005 6:27 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.422622 Overall Rank: 3055 The following users have marked this poem on their favorites list:
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JoyLuck @ 65.60.139.26
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7-Mar-05/7:03 PM
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i usually wait for the signal to clear on the porno channel so i could view some boobies, but hey...look at peacocks
I know what you mean. I want something crazy to happen. That's way when I get the chance I go eggbomb my school. That is so much fucken fun and it's even better when my friends come with me. We fuck my school up.
thanks - sounds like fun ..............im glad you liked me poem! (that is the point of poetry, i suppose, to envoke emotion or make a statement......)
-emili
its truly sad how most live in the box our society has created, personaly im waiting for the news flash that all will change we will be shed of the elite control that seeks to conform us at every corner.. so sad, but hope holds strong for many, we will be free and our lives will once again be ours to live, freely without restraint, or repression, find a feild and run, do what ever empowers you, what ever rekindles that spark. and above all...Step away from the chocolates no hope of flyin with searching for happiness in a truffle box!
~Autumn
After the revolution, we'll build specially programmed robots to take you out of the box without any effort on your part.
ahh you incorrectly imply that i live in the box ;). never my friend NEVER!
As for the robots, like hell! free will must be honored for thos whom choose to find comfort in the box, sad but true. And have you really acomplished anything in live if you have never put forth the effort?
YOu are a dumpling that lives in the fetid stew of your own incompetence.
you are a close minded judgemental person from what i see. So quick to assume your high up on the ladder... well i begg to differ and i refuse to accept your last comment.
I am not incompetant, i lack much schooling yes, but to jump to incompetant, sheesh. so i will repeat what i stated in my last comment, sad, so very sad. ~Autumn
to truly refuse to accept my last comment would be to not reply to it. you replied. this act implies acceptance. You, in light of this overwhelming evidence, DO accept my comment.
you are swelling nicely in your stew, which simmers fancifully around your browne sides. you are almost ready. I am beginning to salivate at the prosepect of having a nibble.
ahhh on the contrary, to respond does not mean to accept. to accept this comment i would have to agree or approve of what you stated above. I do not accept it, therefore i refuse it. perhaps i mearly replied for the stimulation of confrontation....
never assume you know all the answers. ;) ~Autumn
You are incompetent. Stop chasing rainbows and start chasing that elusive C minus in your English class. I would suggest you start by swallowing your teacher's bulbous bratwurst; it is your only real chance.
I am not incompetent thank you very much!. Yes my English is by far not up to par, for that i have , and do apologize. My grammer is even worse, AS for a teacher... ummm ive been out of school for 12 years, i do plan to go back once my babies are alittle older. But i assure you i am not incompetent, just lacking alot of schooling.. and before you go jumping the gun saying im a drop out, i was signed out of grade 9 when i was kicked out of my house!. It really shocks me that some of you people can be so quick to judge, so quick to assume you are all knowing. It is truly pathetic!
as for my nic rainbow chaser, it speeks of an animal who can stalk, waiting for the right moment to grasp what it is he wants.. The animal reeks of introspection... So mr hot shot, can you figure out what animal i speek of? ~Autumn
"Yes my English is by far not up to par, for that i have , and do apologize. My grammer is even worse"
You have just admitted to incompetence as a writer. Can you not see this? I never asked for your sordid family history. Please keep the details of your life to yourself, until you get to the Jerry Springer stage. Then let them fly like your shoes. Mr. Hot Shot is out to lunch. Would you like to leave a message?
P.S. In order to learn how to speak and write a language, one need not attend school.
PPS I assumed you were young. It may be far worse than I origninally thought.
Pardon me Ed, Perhaps you should back off and stop with your assumptions first of all.
Second of all I gave you a few facts as to why my spelling and grammer is so far off, admitted, apologized and mearly shed some light on the subject. Third off, yes i am young in some's eyes. Is this a bad thing??? Last but not least could we get of this poor womans comment page, I'm sure no one wants to hear what you or myself has to say to eachother. If you wish to throw more judgments or insults my way could you at least have the courtisy to do so on one of my own poem comment pages? Sorry to all those who have had to read all this crap. Most of all sorry to poetess. I never should have let it go this far. ~Autumn
"Last but not least could we get of this poor womans comment page, I'm sure no one wants to hear what you or myself has to say to eachother. "
Interesting comment to write on "this poor woman's comment page." I suppose irony is a foreign concept. then you go on to apologize to those who have had to read all this crap, while posting MORE CRAP. Beautiful stuff.
"personaly I'M waiting for the news flash that all will change WE will be shed of the elite control that seeks to conform US at every corner" [emphasis added]
-Rainbow_chaser PS-You could put forth the effort to actually learn to communicate in your native language. "close minded" is actually closedminded, closed-minded or closed minded.
I am sorry, yes i know my English is horrid. Rest assured i do plan to go back to school, Once my children are alittle older, Until then i work with what i have. Forgive my mistakes.
~Autumn
I've read everything you've written up to date, and found two things. A) You need to use spell check. I tend to overlook a typo here or there(I mean come on they happen) but for the love of Buddha, save us the eyes strain. B) You can't be out of high school yet, are you? Your writting has the arrogant tone of someone who thinks they are a genius, but is still being taught. I'm guessing that you tend to read the materials during class, but fail to do the homework more often than not.
This is by far the most poetic (and best)thing you've written to date. -8- <3 Jason
may i ask if you are generally an intuitive person, because id say you have guessed everything right
interesting BUddha reference and especially the hw part, you are right i dont think i am a genius at least i dont think i do, but if you associate my arrogance with my sophmoric schooling, then i can remain confident that it will pass, this one was the most natural poem by far, in means of how it came out, and sometimes i speak but not as if I am myself, which may account for some arrogance in general i think my issue is that i feel like everybody everywhere is suffering but im not and its not fair to them and why arent i doing more for society; i have yet to find my balance give me time -emili
You may and its more like I'm much more practiced in typos and idealism writer/reader. I'm Buddhist. I've made similar typos, and I'm a semi-arrogant person.
<3 Jason
I don't think anybody gets you. I've read the comments and see you as much younger, but like me, healthy, smart and bored. Jumping off a bridge and can't even drown. So what can I tell you except to find somepalce to feel needed and keep plugging away at this; it has potential.
thank you
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