Re: happy hour by Limness	23-Sep-02/10:25 PM
I like it. I'm not sure I totally follow how you got from scene to scene but I like it.
Re: Hearts End by grrund	23-Sep-02/10:03 PM
Better. :) Not to be nit picky or any thing but I liked the stanzas. It made it easier to read. I just didn't like the onomatopoeia. Any way, nice work and it's your poem. No need to please me. :)
Re: The Hand of God by Christof	23-Sep-02/9:18 PM
How is it that I some how missed your work until tonight?
Re: Belongings by Christof	23-Sep-02/9:10 PM
Another hit.
Re: Twilight by grrund	23-Sep-02/8:58 PM
What is a wight?
Re: Hearts End by grrund	23-Sep-02/8:55 PM
I don't get it. It seems like you wanted to be morbid but then there's the Zoom, Varoom, and Booms. Even if you were going for contrast I think they spoiled the mood. If they were simply to signify the car then I still don't like them. Other than that I like but they ruined it just enough for me that the 8 falls to a 5.
Re: For You by aperfecttool77	22-Sep-02/10:54 PM
[thumbsup] Good job. Glad you finally got in buddy.
Re: one childless girl by mallory180	22-Sep-02/2:06 PM
:( Reminds me of a friend of mine. (See "Whisper Under the Thunder") 10.
Re: the story of an arrogant butterfly by kawakurdi	12-Sep-02/12:06 AM
I happened to like it. Pay no attention to them.
Re: untitled #2 by darby pyn	8-Sep-02/8:54 PM
Good job. (Check for typos though)
Re: Winged Beauty by ThoughtfulSoul	12-Aug-02/10:03 PM
Poetandknowit sounds like a cranky arse to me. While I agree there are some poems that are not great here, yours deserves no such insults. It shows effort which is more than can be said for others.
Re: summer by itchiwitch	12-Aug-02/9:49 PM
Those last lines can be a pain in the ass.
Re: Blinded by Your Kiss by ThoughtfulSoul	12-Aug-02/9:45 PM
I don't really see this as a lyrical poem but maybe I just missed the rhythm. Other than that I found it a nice poem.
Re: Innsmouth by razorgrin	9-Aug-02/12:42 PM
Please comment about poems not people. (As a side note, if you are going to comment about others and make fun of their spelling please get a simple word like Canada right.) Razorgrin I like the poem and I am familiar with the works of H.P. Lovecraft and Brian Lumley. The adventures of Titus Crow and the Cthulhu Mythos are great reads. Nice work.
Re: suicide by durk	9-Aug-02/12:20 PM
(My poem "Jeff" is about suicide too if you'd like to read and comment.)
Re: suicide by durk	9-Aug-02/12:18 PM
Point taken and sentiment shared. Parts of the poem just seem too much like prose though. Great message, decent poem.
Re: -=Dark_Angel=- & The Canon Episcopi by Bachus	9-Aug-02/12:14 PM
Great poem. That's if you're in middle school and still enjoy bickering. I hope you two kiss and make up at some point.
Re: recent submissions by <~>	1-Aug-02/8:38 PM
lmao. That was great.
Re: Tunder by Bakar	10-Jul-02/9:36 PM
If that is a real "friend" of yours I hope he chokes you to death upon seeing this poem. The last stanza is racist crap. In case you couldn't tell I gave you the 0.
Re: Impermanence by Corey McHattan	10-Jul-02/12:03 AM
"A headstone cold, and flowers bright, Both decaying..." That's actually something I've noticed before. I think you wrote a good poem here.