Re: a comment on Unveiled by aperfecttool77	24-Sep-02/12:19 AM
Expression in this format is poetry though. A wall well painted is not art but there has been an artist who painted black squares on a black canvas and it recieved acclaim as a great piece of art. I found it to be bad but I couldn't deny that it was art.
Re: a comment on Unveiled by aperfecttool77	24-Sep-02/12:12 AM
I see a style to it. He repeats a single line then puts a twist on it at the end. Once again, you're mistaking your dislike of something for it's lack. Just because you don't like the style he used doesn't mean it's not there.
Re: a comment on Unveiled by aperfecttool77	24-Sep-02/12:06 AM
They can say it's not good art. You can say it's not a good poem. That is where your power ends.
Re: a comment on Triangle of the Courtyard Square by OneFingerAnswer	23-Sep-02/11:56 PM
I'll think about it. I won't be doing it tonight though. Thank you for advice that extends beyond "It's boring."
Re: a comment on Unveiled by aperfecttool77	23-Sep-02/11:50 PM
Sometimes I want garlic sometimes I want beans. Some people can't stand beans and others hate garlic. It's all personal taste. You can say that the poem is to plain for you but you cannot deny it standing as a poem.
Re: a comment on Unveiled by aperfecttool77	23-Sep-02/11:47 PM
Ahh... as writers I love many people. Most of them are lyricists. Most of my poetry actually starts in my head as a song and thus it is these people I look to for insperation. Sometimes they use colorful and fancy language. Sometimes they just tell it how it is.
Re: a comment on Triangle of the Courtyard Square by OneFingerAnswer	23-Sep-02/11:41 PM
Thank you. Does it work better for you now?
Re: a comment on Triangle of the Courtyard Square by OneFingerAnswer	23-Sep-02/11:39 PM
Yes, now that that line is pointed out I see it. I'll fix that.
Re: a comment on Unveiled by aperfecttool77	23-Sep-02/11:34 PM
Who I love and how they write have nothing to do with this poem.
Re: a comment on Unveiled by aperfecttool77	23-Sep-02/11:33 PM
What is wrong with a straight foreward presentation of the way one feels? Lack of metaphor and such do not ban a writing from being a poem.
Re: a comment on Triangle of the Courtyard Square by OneFingerAnswer	23-Sep-02/11:27 PM
You called it boring. I was simply apologizing for that. The pronouns how ever are the heart of the poem. They are the three people.
Re: a comment on Triangle of the Courtyard Square by OneFingerAnswer	23-Sep-02/11:20 PM
Active as in showing action. Like "Casey At Bat"
Re: a comment on Unveiled by aperfecttool77	23-Sep-02/11:16 PM
A smile is not fitting in a situation such as this. And who are you to define a poem?
Re: a comment on Triangle of the Courtyard Square by OneFingerAnswer	23-Sep-02/11:13 PM
So far all I have done is run. That seems to be the source of the guilt and hasn't done her any good either. Perhaps it's time I just end it.
Re: a comment on Triangle of the Courtyard Square by OneFingerAnswer	23-Sep-02/11:11 PM
I'm sorry that you feel that way but I didn't intend for this to be an active poem. It is rather simply a description of how the triangle has formed.
Re: making progress (a piece of it) by Limness	23-Sep-02/11:04 PM
If I'm reading it right then much like you this poem seems to have found that it stands better alone. Good job. 8.
Re: a comment on Triangle of the Courtyard Square by OneFingerAnswer	23-Sep-02/11:01 PM
To explain the setting of the poem: The three lovers: Me - The gay man who once believed himself to be bisexual and thus dated the girl The girl - An innocent girl who made the mistake of falling in love with a coward who can't give her the closure she needs (that coward being me) The guy - a third party who seems attracted to the girl and has also caught my eye The problem: I'm not sure if I'd feel better served by him giving her a distraction from me or by having him to myself. The second isn't really a possibility but the heart doesn't care much for practicality.
Re: a comment on happy hour by Limness	23-Sep-02/10:50 PM
Ahh yes.. *Votes* 9.
Re: a comment on happy hour by Limness	23-Sep-02/10:50 PM
I love the new ending. Much better. *Applauds or snaps or does whatever it is that he'm supposed to do to show that he likes it* :)
Re: a comment on happy hour by Limness	23-Sep-02/10:32 PM
I can understand the office and the elevator but the last 5 stanzas seem like a misplaced poem to me. I'm not sure what I'm missing but it doesn't fit with the rest for me.