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suicide (Free verse) by durk
Somebody killed themselves yesterday, And many more did also, and many more will tomorrow. What's wrong America, why do you have to kill your own? What's wrong world, why do you have to kill your own? Whats wrong God, why do you have to kill your own? This somebody - who killed herself yesterday, Guess how old she was? Seventh Fucking Grade! She shot herself in the head with a gun. She'll never get a sip of alcohol. She'll never get to smoke a joint. She'll never get to make love to her boyfriend, or to nature, or to the world. What wrong society, what are we doing to our young, our next generation, the people who will lead the world tomorrow are killing themselves. What do you think about this George Bush? Did you know that girl? Do you care that there are brains of a little twelve year old girl splattered on her Britney Spears poster? George, do you have a daughter, Was she ever in the 7th grade? Hey Colorado, Hey America, Hey Japan, Hey Taliban, Hey World, Hey God, Do you care about this dead girl? What if your little 7th grade girl was dead? How would you feel then? I have a sister - 7th grade - when I think about this, it scares the shit out of me. Come on Society, lets keep out heads, lets work out our simple problems - What's that bad in 7th grade - Society, look at the world you've made. 2-2-02

Up the ladder: Flower
Down the ladder: I heard it on the grapevine

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Posted: August 9, 2002 11:26 AM PDT; Last modified: August 9, 2002 11:26 AM PDT
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[n/a] razorgrin @ 142.166.105.202 | 9-Aug-02/12:17 PM | Reply
"suicide is painless/it brings on many changes..." I agree that the problems that are rampant in our society must be solved. However, as for the issue of suicide, if some schmuck wants to end it all, fuck 'em. Let them do it.
[7] OneFingerAnswer @ 216.138.10.42 | 9-Aug-02/12:18 PM | Reply
Point taken and sentiment shared. Parts of the poem just seem too much like prose though. Great message, decent poem.
[7] OneFingerAnswer @ 216.138.10.42 | 9-Aug-02/12:20 PM | Reply
(My poem "Jeff" is about suicide too if you'd like to read and comment.)
[1] deleted user @ 63.232.174.43 | 9-Aug-02/2:53 PM | Reply
Change to title. I have always thought political poems carried more power with subtlety. Of, course, there is none hear. I understand your points, and I do not have a problem with the prose aspect ??? there is a thing called a prose poem and this is far from it. This is simply free verse. I just think you should find the real poem in all of this.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 217.39.156.52 | 9-Aug-02/3:13 PM | Reply
why Japan? are they naughty too?
[6] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 | 9-Aug-02/4:12 PM | Reply
Britney Spears has never looked better! How do you know what she hadn't done yet? If you're brave enough to blow your brains out odds are you've been around drugs and alchohol for a while, and perhaps daddy already stole her little flower, or maybe uncle chester. She was ripe for suicide. Let's ask that fuck face with the t.v show who talks to the dead. Surely he must know. Surely he must.
[0] god'swife @ 67.73.35.29 | 13-Oct-03/1:55 PM | Reply
Oh sweet Jesus, this site has turned into a craphole for meandering neonates.
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