you must have incredibly boring dreams seeing the same crap in each one. I must say young fellow you are the better of the gaggle of giggling adolescents that are taking up space from the real poets (five or six) on this site and that is not a compliment. anywho, hopefully college will give you a bit of experience and make these things you call lyrics and poems more interesting.

Poetandknowit sounds like a cranky arse to me. While I agree there are some poems that are not great here, yours deserves no such insults. It shows effort which is more than can be said for others.

Yes, though this needs polishing, it's good deep down. Don't worry about "poetandknowit", he's a pompous, pretentious bastard who seems to have deemed himself the most knowing and mature "poet" on the site, and therefore it's his job to ensure creeping postmodernism and to keep all the comments on topic. He is,in short, a wannabe dictator, poorly endowed and lacking in social skills.

poetandknowit... you went to college? I, honestly, am surprised. Did you major in business? Economics? Accounting? I had the impression that there was a writing requirement for most college degrees. Obviously you found a way around that. Congratulations.
Thoughtfulsoul, try to develop your images a little more. "The sight of her extended white/feathered wings" is good. Try to slip in a few more gems like that here and there and you'll have a work of art.

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