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Winged Beauty (Free verse) by ThoughtfulSoul

In my dreams she inhabits the sky Her presence blinds mortal eyes Her presence warms mortal hearts The sight of her extended white feathered wings, resembles a look from god Every dream I see her Showing me the way to heaven

limonade 13-Aug-02/11:28 AM
poetandknowit... you went to college? I, honestly, am surprised. Did you major in business? Economics? Accounting? I had the impression that there was a writing requirement for most college degrees. Obviously you found a way around that. Congratulations.
Thoughtfulsoul, try to develop your images a little more. "The sight of her extended white/feathered wings" is good. Try to slip in a few more gems like that here and there and you'll have a work of art.




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