| Re: House of the Risen Son by livingcanvas |
18-Sep-02/6:06 PM |
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Hey are you really half African? tell me, tell me! Where did all your points go?
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| Re: angelic by deafmute2000 |
18-Sep-02/5:23 PM |
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Belittling and sweet at the same time. What usually makes me decrease marks is the wrong/non usage of apostrophe. E.g. you're not your and we're not were.
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| Re: Essential Love by unknown |
18-Sep-02/5:20 PM |
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| Re: Stifled by wordsphincter |
18-Sep-02/1:24 PM |
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Hi Word. I think he/she is trying to create an image of eyes receiving and comprehending(grasping) the image of the courts. It's kinda like my use of the words abhor and accrue in my now deleted "Wandering thoughts".
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| Re: [Untitled] by Sirena_Feroz |
18-Sep-02/1:16 PM |
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I don't get it. I think you are describing an un-wanted pregnancy. I guess you blame the man and hate the child<--- this of course was my overall impression.
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| Re: Black Buns by Bachus |
18-Sep-02/1:11 PM |
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I guess everyone would have been less irritated if you didn't use the 'n' word, and maybe your so-called message would have been received.
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| Re: affirmative action by thelonefrobros |
18-Sep-02/1:01 PM |
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Yuck!eeeeeeeeeeewwwwwwwwwwww. Green semen! eeeeeeeeeeewwwwwwwwwwww.
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| Re: Why... by livingcanvas |
18-Sep-02/12:47 PM |
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Lol. Questions we all ask ourselves. This is thoughful.
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| Re: spirit of a grama by livingcanvas |
18-Sep-02/12:45 PM |
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One problem though, isn't it supposed to be "Grandma" in the title?
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| Re: spirit of a grama by livingcanvas |
18-Sep-02/12:45 PM |
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Marvelous. Jeez I need to improve.
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| Re: House of the Risen Son by livingcanvas |
18-Sep-02/12:42 PM |
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Wow! your work is good. Please read my Hope poem and leave a comment. I liked this a lot. I never seem to find your name when I check the random poems though, then again I never see mine even when I'm not logged in yet.
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| Re: Bein' Vegan by poetandknowit |
17-Sep-02/8:18 AM |
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I thought you said you chatted as fred but you were in fact Frass. How come bein'Vegan is here? hmmm...?
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| Re: We visited the gay men on the veranda by Frass |
16-Sep-02/7:21 PM |
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Oh and guys he clearly states he has a wife.
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| Re: We visited the gay men on the veranda by Frass |
16-Sep-02/7:20 PM |
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You guys are nuts! The poem is a simple description of your feelings around gay men and how you view them.
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| Re: Lucky Me by savannah |
16-Sep-02/6:32 PM |
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| Re: Gone Away by Christof |
11-Sep-02/5:48 PM |
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;)I share the sentiment when it comes to my boyfriend
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| Re: while you are away on the islands by poetandknowit |
11-Sep-02/5:47 PM |
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Hey Poetandknowit I hope you read this cause I think your comment was very insulting and uncalled for. If you don't have something nice to say or you do not have constructive corrections then keep your bloody opinions to yourself. Imbecile!
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| Re: Seasons by impaired |
11-Sep-02/2:10 PM |
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I actually like it cause it flows well. some typos though, e.g."existance" is supposed to be existence. Favorite part is "....replacing its leaves it surrended...".
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| Re: A Dream Awakened by impaired |
11-Sep-02/2:04 PM |
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I think in line 15, it should be"....in awe at the colors" not 'at'. The poem sounds Minstrel-like to me. I think the last line can be done without. Nice sensitivity. LOL at your comment Bacchus.
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| Re: st. valentine's day mascara by crin |
11-Sep-02/1:29 PM |
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The naughty little violence in the bedroom seems to be getting a little too naughty.
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