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Stifled (Free verse) by wordsphincter Silence from here on in
Ive chosen to stifle my words
Tears no longer forced to stream
I am alone
Reaching for his sacrafice
Promises of a comfort never lost
Abiding by his whispers
Muted whispers
Only to retain
A faint sense of urgency
I feel a lack
My blood flows cold once again
A warmth never to be returned
To my rigid cries
I can but plea with my own mind
Be it of no consequence
To my rageful heart
Eyes too dark to see
What lies beyond this
Wrath of the gods
Upon my stolen lips
A kiss, nocturnal companion
Courts your eyes may never grasp
Up the ladder:
dps 2 - new ver.
Down the ladder:
The Cross Foxes
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Posted: September 17, 2002 11:39 PM PDT; Last modified: September 17, 2002 11:39 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.153681 Overall Rank: 5187 Comments:
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royalflesh @ 67.115.84.106
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18-Sep-02/12:32 AM
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ok. Horray? i guess. 2
What are stolen lips? Give them back. The last line makes no sense - your eyes may never grasp courts? the nocturnal companion courts something that the eys will enver grasp? I've never seen eyes grasping anything anyway - yeuurch.
Hi Word. I think he/she is trying to create an image of eyes receiving and comprehending(grasping) the image of the courts. It's kinda like my use of the words abhor and accrue in my now deleted "Wandering thoughts".
I love your choice of words..."muted whispers" I really like this poem
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