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angelic (Free verse) by deafmute2000 present yourself girl
you know your beautiful
you are craved by those
who are hopeful
for your approval.
what brings you out of the ordinary?
or are you just stuck in neutral
in the middle of a cirlce
formed by those who seek your approval
cause they know your beautiful.
so lady luck to those
who pursue this angel
and felicitations to you
you will remain loyal.
true to yourself
yet another reason
for us to gratify ourselves.
cause you are envy
when were empty
im empty
im ugly
just a mirror to your beauty.
Up the ladder:
The Picnic
Down the ladder:
Windmill by the Sea
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Posted: September 18, 2002 12:56 PM PDT; Last modified: September 18, 2002 12:56 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.548294 Overall Rank: 2489 Comments:
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Amelia @ 198.146.142.38
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18-Sep-02/5:23 PM
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Belittling and sweet at the same time. What usually makes me decrease marks is the wrong/non usage of apostrophe. E.g. you're not your and we're not were.
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<~> @ 24.44.185.41
> Amelia
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18-Sep-02/10:08 PM
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you mean like 'im' i'm? like at the end of this?
if he is girl...then i will swallow my own tongue..and bend like attila.
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