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Windmill by the Sea (Lyric) by Jeremi B. Handrinos [Verse]
Underneath the windmill
By the sea
Everything you ever said
It came too be
Underneath the windmill
By the shore
You left wanting
Left me coming back for more.
[Bridge]
But tell me
Does that burn,
and do you ever think
that we'll learn?
[Chorus]
I promise you
you're the only one
You are my light
You are my sun
Yes, I promise you
you're the only one
That could make me
come undone.
Up the ladder:
angelic
Down the ladder:
The last Smurf standing
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Posted: July 16, 2003 1:59 AM PDT; Last modified: July 16, 2003 1:59 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.548294 Overall Rank: 2490 Comments:
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zzinnia66 @ 167.206.181.179
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16-Jul-03/7:51 AM
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let me know when you post the mp3, okay>?
Yep, I'd like to hear the music to this.
Wheeled Chairs Of Your Mind (Lyric) by -=Dark_Angel=-
Something did a massive dollop And it landed on my head Why did someone eat that turnip that was dangling by a thread? Could you please remove those sandals and that oversized balloon You've inserted in my anus I look just like a baboon Someone stole my last cucumber And my only deck of cards And a giant oblong panda Has exploded in my arse Both my buttocks have been crippled And they look like scrambled eggs Now that motherfucking freight train Has run over both my legs Like a circle in a spiral Like a wheel within a wheel Never ending or beginning On an ever-spinning reel As the images unwind Like the circles that you find In the wheeled chairs of your mind
The Ballad of Cletus Rollsabout. A touching piece, and stimulating.
I made it into a song. I hired a drunk black midget to sing it too. Talk about ACE! this is going to make us a fortune. It will be the first time we get a retarded cripple on the back of a wheaties box! We, my friend, have done a good thing. All I can say is thank you.
Seems incomplete. Perhaps
" You left ( me ) wanting ( Leaving me to come ) back for more ". Do not be afraid to involve more imagery, metaphors on the wind, windmills, even references to being Don Quixote or Sancho Panza and relationships being the mythical dragon. Typo on " too " should be " to " instead. 319 view(s)
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