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Windmill by the Sea (Lyric) by Jeremi B. Handrinos
[Verse] Underneath the windmill By the sea Everything you ever said It came too be Underneath the windmill By the shore You left wanting Left me coming back for more. [Bridge] But tell me Does that burn, and do you ever think that we'll learn? [Chorus] I promise you you're the only one You are my light You are my sun Yes, I promise you you're the only one That could make me come undone.

Up the ladder: angelic
Down the ladder: The last Smurf standing

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.75
Weighted score: 5.548294
Overall Rank: 2456
Posted: July 16, 2003 1:59 AM PDT; Last modified: July 16, 2003 1:59 AM PDT
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Comments:
[8] zzinnia66 @ 167.206.181.179 | 16-Jul-03/7:51 AM | Reply
let me know when you post the mp3, okay>?
[n/a] Christof @ 217.44.71.83 | 16-Jul-03/8:09 AM | Reply
Yep, I'd like to hear the music to this.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 217.35.166.113 | 17-Jul-03/12:51 PM | Reply
Wheeled Chairs Of Your Mind (Lyric) by -=Dark_Angel=-

Something did a massive dollop
And it landed on my head
Why did someone eat that turnip
that was dangling by a thread?
Could you please remove those sandals
and that oversized balloon
You've inserted in my anus
I look just like a baboon
Someone stole my last cucumber
And my only deck of cards
And a giant oblong panda
Has exploded in my arse
Both my buttocks have been crippled
And they look like scrambled eggs
Now that motherfucking freight train
Has run over both my legs
Like a circle in a spiral
Like a wheel within a wheel
Never ending or beginning
On an ever-spinning reel
As the images unwind
Like the circles that you find
In the wheeled chairs of your mind
[n/a] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 17-Jul-03/1:57 PM | Reply
The Ballad of Cletus Rollsabout. A touching piece, and stimulating.
[n/a] Jeremi B. Handrinos @ 24.126.116.54 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 13-Nov-03/12:53 AM | Reply
I made it into a song. I hired a drunk black midget to sing it too. Talk about ACE! this is going to make us a fortune. It will be the first time we get a retarded cripple on the back of a wheaties box! We, my friend, have done a good thing. All I can say is thank you.
[4] jh99 @ 75.220.45.254 | 28-Feb-10/6:29 AM | Reply
Seems incomplete. Perhaps
" You left ( me ) wanting
( Leaving me to come ) back for more ". Do not be afraid to involve more imagery, metaphors on the wind, windmills, even references to being Don Quixote or Sancho Panza and relationships being the mythical dragon. Typo on " too " should be " to " instead.
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