| Re: The MV-perience by Modulo |
11-Sep-02/1:10 PM |
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| Re: We visited the gay men on the veranda by Frass |
16-Sep-02/7:20 PM |
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You guys are nuts! The poem is a simple description of your feelings around gay men and how you view them.
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| Re: Cat and Door by gothwalk |
11-Sep-02/1:26 PM |
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| Re: Inner Peace by god |
11-Sep-02/1:17 PM |
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| Re: A Dream Awakened by impaired |
11-Sep-02/2:04 PM |
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I think in line 15, it should be"....in awe at the colors" not 'at'. The poem sounds Minstrel-like to me. I think the last line can be done without. Nice sensitivity. LOL at your comment Bacchus.
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| Re: Seasons by impaired |
11-Sep-02/2:10 PM |
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I actually like it cause it flows well. some typos though, e.g."existance" is supposed to be existence. Favorite part is "....replacing its leaves it surrended...".
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11-Sep-02/1:17 PM |
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| Re: What is Black by ivoryangie1 |
11-Sep-02/1:12 PM |
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add 'nd' to the 'a' between big and strong. Keep being proud.
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| Re: Loneliness by Cha no Onna |
11-Sep-02/1:12 PM |
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11-Sep-02/1:14 PM |
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| Re: Dick Cheney, Man of Tomorrow by bondjedi |
11-Sep-02/1:14 PM |
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| Re: #9 by mikejedw |
11-Sep-02/1:15 PM |
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| Re: R'lyeh by razorgrin |
11-Sep-02/1:15 PM |
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| Re: Fallen Leaves From a Tree by kristenk69lover |
11-Sep-02/1:26 PM |
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You have a nice thing going but like some other commenter said you tend to give your point away so the poem kinda looses it's essence. Try writing(which you are doing a great job of) and then reading through to see which lines you can omit. Poetry(my definition) is the medium through which a person(poet) describes feelings without being too definitive. Good luck. :-)
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| Re: The Weaver's Curse by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. |
11-Sep-02/1:28 PM |
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Is it supposed to be "loon?" Oh yeah it is loom cos it's titled the weaver's curse. Well I don't get it.
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| Re: st. valentine's day mascara by crin |
11-Sep-02/1:29 PM |
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The naughty little violence in the bedroom seems to be getting a little too naughty.
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| Re: Lucky Me by savannah |
16-Sep-02/6:32 PM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
11-Sep-02/2:05 PM |
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"....some magic some magic..." delete one. have a nice day.
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| Re: while you are away on the islands by poetandknowit |
11-Sep-02/5:47 PM |
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Hey Poetandknowit I hope you read this cause I think your comment was very insulting and uncalled for. If you don't have something nice to say or you do not have constructive corrections then keep your bloody opinions to yourself. Imbecile!
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| Re: Gone Away by Christof |
11-Sep-02/5:48 PM |
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;)I share the sentiment when it comes to my boyfriend
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