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Loneliness (Haiku) by Cha no Onna Skytears bleed from the
Flowers and jeweled fishnet
Beyond prison glass
Up the ladder:
Oh boo
Down the ladder:
why should i
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Posted: April 12, 2002 10:28 PM PDT; Last modified: April 12, 2002 10:28 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.4284554 Overall Rank: 12936 Comments:
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13-Apr-02/12:57 AM
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I think this has too many different images glommed into one for me, too much going on. rain == sky tears == sky is crying... tears are bleeding... so rain is rolling off the flowers... jeweled fishnet? a spider's web? outside the window. I think with all the extras tossed in, the meaning is less powerful.
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Cha no Onna @ 206.110.252.242
> nentwined
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8-Oct-02/5:11 PM
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I wrote this poem 12 years ago when I was 15. Yeah, it needs work.
Look at me, I'm a vampyre: FLAP FLAP FLAP FLAP
You're cute!
the picture isn't a clear to me as the words are vivid.
Rain?? half-beautiful, disappearing....
Hmmm...
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