Fallen Leaves From a Tree

Member since 2002 · Posted 29 Aug 2002 · 12 comments

Have you ever noticed When leaves fall from a tree With each wind They blow in opposite directions? Stopping long enough To feel the earths warmth But leaving again When the wind's confrontation arrives. It's the same with life. A heart blown away... A soul that wants to linger, Enjoying life's warmth but is unable to do so... because of life's many twists. You become weaker with each breath, Until you are swept away again; Not staying long enough To fully realize the beauty that surrounds you. As when babies cry and are comforted With a mother's touch, For a while, they are content Until hunger sets in again. This is like love... Like so many others We are content, Longing to wallow in each other's hearts, Until the winds blow And the weak can't hold on... It brushes you away... Afraid of grasping Afraid of hurting Afraid to look life in its eyes Because it is unlike anything you've ever conquered Fear of rejection Fear of loss Fear of being in love... So, we're like the leaves Blowing in the wind, Stopping long enough To get a real taste of love. But too afraid To embed ourselves in nature's treasures, We blow away with the wind once again... Praying the storm stops, And allows you to rest... Knowing you could be lost forever...

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[n/a] Bachus 29-Aug-02/9:03 PM Reply

another fine example of why michael jackson looks the way he does and touches little boys on their penises. their nice soft penises, remind me of a flying leaf that lands right 'pon my lap...i guess that 69 in your name makes you an expert on leaf navagations and love huh.....better leaf the poetry to those who write and dont BLOW! you blow....lol! and deep down inside too.....you fail..misserably. good luck.. have fun here...stay as long as you want, and write more.....please..i need the extra targets.i

[0] poetandknowit 29-Aug-02/10:15 PM Reply

I feel you honey.... I fell the loss...the leave...fall..ing...i am..afraid.. of ;;; falling--- asleep000before... i fin--ish ..the first ..line. Absoulte brillance. More, please, more....

[n/a] Venus 29-Aug-02/10:36 PM Reply

Kristen - you have potential, keep working on it. And if you want some true critique and help, there are some wonderful poets that can help you on this site. Just ask them for help. Specifically, zzinnia and god's wife can be very helpful to struggling poets in the mist.

[n/a] Bachus 29-Aug-02/10:48 PM Reply

venus don't be nieve! this is the dark one dressed in head gear...trust me...D.A! DAMNIT get out of the tart immediately...i rebuke you!!!!!o

[6] Christof 30-Aug-02/5:41 AM Reply

I like your central image and I think if you concentrated on that without resorting to explanation e.g. 'It's the same with life' this would eb much better. Trust your images to be themselves, you shouldn't have to spell it out. You could have said the same with far more impact in a third of the lines. The ending has a gracefulness that I like though.

[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 30-Aug-02/9:03 AM Reply

Potential schmotential. Is this poetentialranker? Or poemeranker?

[n/a] Venus 30-Aug-02/12:09 PM Reply

DA - I thought it was poemwanker, but what does that have to do with anything anyway? I rank, I comment, I do my little duty.

[n/a] kristenk69lover 30-Aug-02/12:12 PM Reply

hut the fuck up all you poems are onthe worst poem page.

[n/a] kristenk69lover 30-Aug-02/12:12 PM Reply

you poems suck as well.

[0] razorgrin 30-Aug-02/1:15 PM Reply

This is a fine example of why we need more violent crime. I mean this is just crap. It's like hallmark got drunk and weepy. read more, kid. that boy in your class is too cool for you anyway.

[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 31-Aug-02/7:21 AM Reply

A ha haha. A ha ha hahahahahaha. Oh, kristenk69lover, does the moon not rise with a sad face? Do birds not fly in olde disgrace? Of course not. I suggest you take THAT into consideration the next you dare to comment on my poemes.

[7] Amelia 11-Sep-02/1:26 PM Reply

You have a nice thing going but like some other commenter said you tend to give your point away so the poem kinda looses it's essence. Try writing(which you are doing a great job of) and then reading through to see which lines you can omit. Poetry(my definition) is the medium through which a person(poet) describes feelings without being too definitive. Good luck. :-)