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Fallen Leaves From a Tree (Other) by kristenk69lover

Have you ever noticed When leaves fall from a tree With each wind They blow in opposite directions? Stopping long enough To feel the earths warmth But leaving again When the wind's confrontation arrives. It's the same with life. A heart blown away... A soul that wants to linger, Enjoying life's warmth but is unable to do so... because of life's many twists. You become weaker with each breath, Until you are swept away again; Not staying long enough To fully realize the beauty that surrounds you. As when babies cry and are comforted With a mother's touch, For a while, they are content Until hunger sets in again. This is like love... Like so many others We are content, Longing to wallow in each other's hearts, Until the winds blow And the weak can't hold on... It brushes you away... Afraid of grasping Afraid of hurting Afraid to look life in its eyes Because it is unlike anything you've ever conquered Fear of rejection Fear of loss Fear of being in love... So, we're like the leaves Blowing in the wind, Stopping long enough To get a real taste of love. But too afraid To embed ourselves in nature's treasures, We blow away with the wind once again... Praying the storm stops, And allows you to rest... Knowing you could be lost forever...

Christof 30-Aug-02/5:41 AM
I like your central image and I think if you concentrated on that without resorting to explanation e.g. 'It's the same with life' this would eb much better. Trust your images to be themselves, you shouldn't have to spell it out. You could have said the same with far more impact in a third of the lines. The ending has a gracefulness that I like though.




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