on ship by Sh|t?
3 Mar 2003, 5:35 AM
as weak as an old man's bladder.
on For those who play with shit by <{Baba^Yaga}>
3 Mar 2003, 5:31 AM
I was doing fine until you made fun of bacon. it is my breakfast meat of choice, and it is not gay.
however, the last is the best.
however, the last is the best.
on Grouchy Smurf (in limerick) by Bachus
3 Mar 2003, 5:29 AM
most likely all of the above. 8 grins.
on Suicidal Thoughts #2 by CrAzYlAdY Surukain
24 Feb 2003, 6:10 AM
It is not worth it. Pull yourself out of your funk. Eat some chocolate, watch a comedy, go for a walk or a run--even if it is cold outside (especially if its cold outside) then write some more poems.
on Suicidal thoughts by CrAzYlAdY Surukain
24 Feb 2003, 6:07 AM
Don't do it. You need to stick around to write more poetry.
on He put a price on her head by Nanshe
24 Feb 2003, 6:06 AM
just buggy.
on On The First Night by OneFingerAnswer
24 Feb 2003, 6:04 AM
Nice, but seems to lack anything concrete or precise.
on I did not have sexual relations with that woman by scitz
24 Feb 2003, 6:03 AM
perhaps cum and go?
replying on Mommy, why does -=DarkAngel=- use 'an' so much? by <{Baba^Yaga}>
16 Jan 2003, 6:00 AM
I think you are being oversensitive about it. pointing out a distraction is a lot different from slamming you.
replying on The blue light special. by Jeremi B. Handrinos
16 Jan 2003, 5:57 AM
Here's my point, if you don't keep to the form of a particular type of poem, then classify it as "freeform". The idea behind a poem following a certain style is the fact that the poet recognizes the constraints and used the constraints to free their creative process. Maintaining a form continues a tradition---and I'm all for doing your own thing--Don't get me wrong. But you can't call a tent a house just because you want to- to hell with an agreed upon format. Go ahead and do your own thing, expirement with rhyme schemes, etc., but doing so slips your poem into a different category. that is my point. your poems have ceased to be limericks as soon as they deviated from the traditional format. I do believe that you are capable of writing a limerick that meets the definition of one. These, however, are misclassified.
replying on The blue light special. by Jeremi B. Handrinos
15 Jan 2003, 12:29 PM
Limericks use the distinctive rhyming scheme of a-a-b-b-a, where the first two lines set the scene, the third and fourth lines quickly twist things about, and the fifth line hammers the conclusion. (first, second, and fifth lines are trimeter, third and fourth are dimeter).
as per the guidelines
as per the guidelines
on unbroken by roses are read
15 Jan 2003, 7:47 AM
rhyme scheme A+
line length A+
rhythm C (inconsistent stresses)
meaning B
Grade - 8
line length A+
rhythm C (inconsistent stresses)
meaning B
Grade - 8
on Little Tounge by Figure 8
14 Jan 2003, 7:48 AM
what is a "tounge"? according to www.dictionary.com, the closest word is "lounge". but I guess if you are "licking" with it, perhaps it is a tongue. Even so, this "sing-song" thing here is of little merit.
on RAP MASTER by UAFANTHORPEY
13 Jan 2003, 11:36 AM
general inconsistent tone.
on a poet in the city by Bill Z Bub
13 Jan 2003, 10:01 AM
I like the first half a lot.
on Rose Wall by Carvaceous
13 Jan 2003, 9:57 AM
they won't grow. they're made of paint, you silly goose! (just kidding) a valliant attempt! an 8.
on strange beds (1983) by Bill Z Bub
13 Jan 2003, 9:55 AM
nicely done. solid 9.
on Another Day by Brighteyes
13 Jan 2003, 9:53 AM
sounds troubled--like a therapy poem. I hope you are feeling better, but you should keep therapy poems to yourself--too often thet sound exactly like this and come across as trite.
on I gots me a postcard, motherfucker. by <{Baba^Yaga}>
13 Jan 2003, 9:45 AM
certainly unique.