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unbroken (Sonnet) by roses are read
I have tried to be beautiful and strong. I have watched roses bloom into glory. I have tried so hard to sing out my song- All I do is get lost in a story. In truth the roses have become my dreams, They are innocence sweet and na?ve sex, They are passion love, this is me she screams This is me regression of y on x. They say watch it grow as the poppy blooms There I am and I need to get away, I try to walk singing ani's song loom And you hold me back with words you don't say. There is something new in the unspoken, Makes me feel a little more unbroken.

Up the ladder: School.
Down the ladder: Life's Ballet

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.888889
Weighted score: 5.9444447
Overall Rank: 1374
Posted: January 15, 2003 7:02 AM PST; Last modified: January 15, 2003 7:02 AM PST
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Comments:
[8] hipster flare @ 209.68.98.119 | 15-Jan-03/7:47 AM | Reply
rhyme scheme A+
line length A+
rhythm C (inconsistent stresses)
meaning B
Grade - 8
[8] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 15-Aug-03/12:47 AM | Reply
Good, but it could use an edit. 8.
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