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strange beds (1983) (Free verse) by Bill Z Bub
Her parent's bedroom, I assume, from the smell of stale perfume. A charge, a socket surging. Thin and bruised from play in those high summer days, with her sister's boyfriend's praise. She jumped to try and pin me down. And the bed collapsed. Then we ran.

Up the ladder: Fueled hearts
Down the ladder: Tom & Jerry

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.6666665
Weighted score: 5.4482355
Overall Rank: 2886
Posted: December 22, 2002 7:40 PM PST; Last modified: January 12, 2003 7:51 AM PST
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[n/a] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 | 22-Dec-02/8:43 PM | Reply
i almost don't wanna see that last sentence. i thought is was perfect up until that ummm. think on that then i'll come back and vote later, but i'll probably will give it a ten, just for the last stanza alone(not including last sentence) read that bad boy ten times out loud by itself. lol. strong strudel filler batman. how well do you know razorgrin.?
[9] scitz @ 62.105.88.10 | 23-Dec-02/3:30 AM | Reply
***9** your a talent Mr Z.
[8] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 | 23-Dec-02/8:02 AM | Reply
like it
[9] razorgrin @ 192.197.142.146 | 23-Dec-02/9:11 AM | Reply
Cool. I like the last line, but maybe i'm just raving mad. I don't know Mr.Bub, bachus. not to my knowledge, at least
[8] INTRANSIT @ 205.188.208.106 | 23-Dec-02/2:11 PM | Reply
S-3 cornfuses me a bit. I am getting young lust from it though.
[9] hipster flare @ 209.68.66.47 | 13-Jan-03/9:55 AM | Reply
nicely done. solid 9.
[9] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 15-Jan-03/8:03 PM | Reply
Sorry, i've been just missing you lately.9
[9] deleted user @ 24.112.224.232 | 16-Jan-03/8:05 PM | Reply
needs more
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