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Suicidal thoughts (Free verse) by CrAzYlAdY Surukain Deep in anger
My life, it withers
I sit alone
Pacing the knife
Up and down in strokes
I watch the blood flow
To the ground below
Evil racing in my mind
I leave this world behind
The body grows so cold
The only thing I c
Is no one else but me
I leave...
My body behind
In this world I had lost my mind
Through the dark and dreary
I'm the only one I truly fear
Up the ladder:
tomorrow
Down the ladder:
To You (Please Critique and comment)
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 4.5
Posted: February 23, 2003 8:13 PM PST; Last modified: February 23, 2003 8:46 PM PSTWeighted score: 4.865529 Overall Rank: 10323 Comments:
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hipster flare @ 209.68.66.137
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24-Feb-03/6:07 AM
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Don't do it. You need to stick around to write more poetry.
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CrAzYlAdY Surukain @ 66.218.250.64
> hipster flare
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24-Feb-03/9:51 AM
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Thx 4 the votes. Well when i did this poem i did feel like hurting sumthin, i had a knife right next to me so it sparked the idea, * gets hit by a flying thorn bush*.....ow......
Suicide is a very personal decision. If ou have thought it through and feel it is the only viable option, you should go through with it.
What a twisted thing to say. I hope you didn't mean that. It goes against the laws of nature.
Actually, I hold the right to choose how one lives and dies to be one of the most essential rights humans need. As for the laws of nature, most of what people do go against them.
The crazlady....i really like this poem! keep writing
*bows* I thank ye for yr kindness.
Why not listen to -=Dark_Angel=- MP3 Corner #1?!?!? I'm sure it will cheer you up!!!!
http://www.angelfire.com/journal/thwarte
yes, i agree, suicide is perfect for you.
YES I SHALL TELL ALL KINDERGARTENERS YR WISDOM! KILL YRSELVES AND 4EVER U SHALL BE FREEEEEE!!!!!!!! * cough* woops..... um..........yea..
nyet. WE'LL be free. that's the point we make. Less people= more happy.
* gets atacked by an evil flying thorn bush* GAHHHHH!!!!
* later* Wut did that hafta do with nething?............. EXACTLY! NUTHIN! * laughs* im sooo bored....must pass yr wonderful message to all the kindergarteners.......they shall free ME of their stupidity!! MWUAAH! j/k.........gawd im so fuckin bored........I know! Ill go hang myself! BYE!
P.S: I didnt put quotes, it was a message for kindergarteners if they killed themselves they would 4ever be free! but.....i hate goin near lil kids so thas out of the question.
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