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tomorrow (Free verse) by deano if tomorrow is tomorrow
why isnt it tomorrow tomorrow
and if tomorrow becomes today
and the next day becomes tommorow
then what happens to yesterday
when tommorrow becomes today
Up the ladder:
more than i bargained for
Down the ladder:
Suicidal thoughts
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Posted: December 5, 2002 4:56 AM PST; Last modified: December 5, 2002 4:56 AM PSTWeighted score: 4.865529 Overall Rank: 10322 Comments:
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deleted user @ 212.219.142.161
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5-Dec-02/4:57 AM
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Umm...yesterday is today???Or maybe not....does this really make sense???
Tomorrow Tomorrow I love ya, tomorrow its only a day away
(Annie loves it )
who is annie??
If tomorrow is tomorrow, it is tomorrow tomorrow, dumbass. Yesterday becomes the day before yesterday. To summerise: Shut up and never write again, fuckwit. 0 for being so dumb.
Fun, and my sort of fun, to boot. Simple, but overall the cadence is right, and the sounds as well. I don't like "why isn't it tomorrow tomorrow"--that doesn't flow right. Hmm. Yeah, could use some tweaking. But I think it's worth it.
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