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tomorrow (Free verse) by deano

if tomorrow is tomorrow why isnt it tomorrow tomorrow and if tomorrow becomes today and the next day becomes tommorow then what happens to yesterday when tommorrow becomes today

nentwined 4-Oct-06/11:13 AM
Fun, and my sort of fun, to boot. Simple, but overall the cadence is right, and the sounds as well. I don't like "why isn't it tomorrow tomorrow"--that doesn't flow right. Hmm. Yeah, could use some tweaking. But I think it's worth it.




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