poemranker ::To You (Please Critique and comment) by TrulyUnique0642

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Free verse № 43053

To You (Please Critique and comment)

by TrulyUnique0642

Member since 2003 · Posted 8 Mar 2003 · 7 comments

When I close my eyes I see you. I think of you late at night, I dream about you when I am sleeping. Every time I see you, I want to tell you how I feel, I am at a loss for words I get so nervous. It scares me to think of you with someone else, with her. I remember what we had All I can do is cry, And think about how much I love you.

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[3] Freethinker1602 8-Mar-03/7:27 PM Reply
I can stand the thought of mine being with another girl... I want him to. We each wasted such a valuable time of our lives. Stop crying. I mean, it won't help. Once you figure out what you want then you can cry. Just keep looking. Stop focusing on one person
[n/a] TrulyUnique0642 › Freethinker1602 9-Mar-03/3:40 PM Reply
Hey thanks for the advice, and by the way, i'm over him!! That's a fairly old poem.
[0] razorgrin 8-Mar-03/7:34 PM Reply
Poorly written and dull. You probably smell.
[5] Bill Z Bub 8-Mar-03/8:39 PM Reply
I know the feeling.
But you need something more.
Something more than a simple mapping of your current emotional state.
Something slightly more specific.

[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 9-Mar-03/6:25 AM Reply
Wow! You truly are unique! Ace poeme, by the way!
[3] Freethinker1602 › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 9-Mar-03/9:18 AM Reply
Do I detect sarcasm it's so hard to tell with darky...
[n/a] <{Baba^Yaga}> 9-Mar-03/11:23 AM Reply
It scares me more to think of me with you.