on Severe Acute Respiratory Syndrome by Stephen Robins
11 Apr 2003, 9:10 AM
I will quit smoking and prepare.
replying on Did You Notice? by Bonehiss
11 Apr 2003, 9:07 AM
Onyx sunlight
Fights extrovertadly in our chapped cloak.
Does I ignore
Your watery splendor
Freeze up into the emerald desert!
AND SO WITH ON THAT BONE.
Fights extrovertadly in our chapped cloak.
Does I ignore
Your watery splendor
Freeze up into the emerald desert!
AND SO WITH ON THAT BONE.
on Dogwood Winter by Rex Karrs
11 Apr 2003, 9:02 AM
Seems to me that you're in Korea often, Rex.
replying on Everything Counts by Lord Ganus
11 Apr 2003, 8:55 AM
You should actually give a thanks to the original writers of this piece Martin and dave from Depeche mode.
on Damaged By 'Weakness' by Mr Pig
11 Apr 2003, 8:38 AM
",
..................I LOVE YOU !" you can lose this, because the reader already knows, and if they don't by the end they don't deserve to.
..................I LOVE YOU !" you can lose this, because the reader already knows, and if they don't by the end they don't deserve to.
on Februarys mother by INTRANSIT
11 Apr 2003, 8:35 AM
"awaken until September" reach September. or, survive the journey.
on You are not me by Mutant_X
11 Apr 2003, 8:33 AM
A typical topical right down the receptacle, "now out the window".
on Sorry for all the things by Mutant_X
11 Apr 2003, 8:31 AM
Sincerety, is a nose wipe on a cold sleeve at the bus stop in third grade.
on You Say by adrenalize
11 Apr 2003, 8:27 AM
"The loneliness
Thatâs my only companion
And yet
You say
You want them back"
also, or too would be the last word probably 'too'.
then you could say... But that's something you can never have back, or unreturnable. and that would be putting your foot down nicely to conclude the piece.
Thatâs my only companion
And yet
You say
You want them back"
also, or too would be the last word probably 'too'.
then you could say... But that's something you can never have back, or unreturnable. and that would be putting your foot down nicely to conclude the piece.
on Originality by shwenatjadeflower
10 Apr 2003, 10:34 PM
Once, I almost choked to death on a frozen milky~way bar while naked on pcp in a Mcdonald's walkin cooler.
replying on Fraternity hazing the sheepdog by horus8
10 Apr 2003, 7:50 PM
word, max tHe xam ,drow
on Tendering the question by Nanshe
7 Apr 2003, 11:38 PM
GQTIP awarde. not that there's much competition tonight.
on For Kristen by thepinkbunnyofdoom
7 Apr 2003, 11:33 PM
here. don't say i never did nothing for you.
that's a fucking aneurysm my friend, totally unfixable. however you did a wonderful job complicating an uncomplicated and ancient structure (sonnets) and that's got to count for something somewhere. and the unaccessability of the piece? also, right off the fucking charts. Great job.
on and i don't even care by nolan
7 Apr 2003, 11:22 PM
Now that's breaking some fucking wind. lol! asl???
replying on Black Magic by <{Baba^Yaga}>
6 Apr 2003, 9:40 PM
Mind day, find say, dissonance cursed, ominous versed, book me, look free, night-light.
If I wanted to write a real poem on black magic and not a bilboard counting device, to see how many idiots come over to see "black magic" I would. hatmf???
If I wanted to write a real poem on black magic and not a bilboard counting device, to see how many idiots come over to see "black magic" I would. hatmf???
replying on the photobooth by Bill Z Bub
6 Apr 2003, 9:19 PM
Speaking of shit suckers... I'm amazed at how you get the corn up the straw, and the peanuts out of your teeth prior to visiting the family golden hen for another hand out. that's skill. Others may doubt it, but me, I'm impressed.
on papercut suicide by papercut
6 Apr 2003, 9:06 PM
You could add double the amount of the already doubled amount of simplistic adjectives that you used in this piece and still not manage to cut yourself. Perhaps instead you'll cut the cheese.
on the photobooth by Bill Z Bub
6 Apr 2003, 8:35 PM
Great title and equally written to maintain that fact.I would of gave it a nine, but I see you are still writing it so... later i guess i might.
Ignite this.