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Februarys mother

by INTRANSIT

Member since 2002 · Posted 31 Dec 2002 · Edited 11 Apr 2003 · 10 comments

The Sun flower reaches for us as we lay between the evergreen trees on a silken bed of autumn leaves. Our bodies intertwine the Indian wind as it blows tender over us. I tickle the water as I swim upstream the salmon river. All the while knowing we will never awaken until September.

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[8] powerline 31-Dec-02/7:14 PM Reply
Nice. Caught all the images solid. There is so much to be said about letting a verse hang out there, letting others take from it what they may.

In this case, what the words meant to you also carried with me.

[n/a] INTRANSIT › powerline 1-Jan-03/8:04 AM Reply
Would you mind telling me what you saw or felt when you read this? I'm so afraid of touching this one, but an outside view is tantamount to improvement,yes?
[7] Mutant_X 12-Mar-03/7:25 AM Reply
Hi,i would like to invite you to join my poetry group at Studencenter.org,if you are interested just tell me.
[7] Mr Pig 11-Apr-03/8:17 AM Reply
February's mother is cold and unforgiving, not like mine thank goodness. I like the line of the indian wind, I too have used similar connotations in my poem lovers lane, your work is often majestic but sometimes I think by shortening some of your work you deprive us of enough. Its hard to put more light on it, what do you think kind sir? 7
[7] Mr Pig 11-Apr-03/8:19 AM Reply
I would love you to read a poem Richa wrote about butterflies, wonderful language, it inspired me for my next poem.

Sorry if one appears a fringe intrusive, just trying to help you, because I think your a gentleman.
[7] Mr Pig 11-Apr-03/8:23 AM Reply
Dear Mr In-transit.
A formal request for you to please offer any thoughts on my recent posting.

Kind Regards

Laurence. aka Mr Pig
[7] horus8 11-Apr-03/8:35 AM Reply
"awaken until September" reach September. or, survive the journey.
[7] richa 11-Apr-03/10:38 AM Reply
Nice, cant pick any faults
Maybe a bit short

I think a killer line might make this poem,
I hope you find one
[8] kalikopeli 11-Apr-03/2:29 PM Reply
awesome, awesome, awesome. talent you hold with the greatest regards. dr.
[7] Mutant_X 11-Apr-03/4:33 PM Reply
something about it touches me alhtough i can't really tell whut.