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You Say (Free verse) by adrenalize
You say Your letters I must return, I must return Those nights, those memories All the things we said You say You want them back Just some withered flowers In the books A face That’s still in my dreams A few gifts Some pictures This is all I’m left with The loneliness That’s my only companion And yet You say You want them back The good times The sorrows The promises and vows The seasons All of them The tears The moments that time stood still Each and every one The loneliness That’s my only companion And yet You say You want them back

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.5
Weighted score: 5.0596013
Overall Rank: 6679
Posted: April 11, 2003 8:16 AM PDT; Last modified: April 11, 2003 8:16 AM PDT
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[7] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 11-Apr-03/8:27 AM | Reply
"The loneliness
That’s my only companion
And yet
You say
You want them back"
also, or too would be the last word probably 'too'.
then you could say... But that's something you can never have back, or unreturnable. and that would be putting your foot down nicely to conclude the piece.
[8] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 24.209.19.37 | 12-Apr-03/12:45 PM | Reply
Shame shame you have my permission to beat them with an old photo frame(no new ones cause why was something new) to the point of unconsiousness but no further! Its over when the lights go out! You Hear me! There are limits to how far you can go even when some one is that big an ANUS.
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