regarding some deleted poem...	7-Sep-02/3:21 PM
It's a nice idea, an interesting description of a seemingly straightforward thing; except what you've done is made a straightforward description of a straightforward thing.
Re: Water Droplet by craiggiarc1971	7-Sep-02/3:37 PM
Aha! I understand the poem! All the pairs of words are related - EXCEPT SKIN AND CUSTARD!!!!11 - we are being forced to reconsider whether we are not, after all, cannibals.
Re: Forbidden Love by beakism	7-Sep-02/3:39 PM
come on, deidre, write a poem. I want to write long, abusive comments. I want to vote zero. I want to write poems about how ugly and talentless you are. so hurry up.
Re: The heart of self destruction by Roisin	8-Sep-02/3:56 AM
line five, I think what you actually mean is 'as we lie'. lie (lying; lay; lain) : to be or to stay at rest in a horizontal position; rest, recline... lay (laid) : to put or set down. speak is in the present tense, so apparently you and your friend are laying eggs while you speak tenderly.
regarding some deleted poem...	8-Sep-02/4:33 AM
Oranges! Fresh Oranges! A paand a paand! Hold it there, Sir! You are under arrest, for not selling your merchandise in kilograms.
Re: Don't Wanna Know by nightii	8-Sep-02/4:41 AM
Look, I have to side with Dark_Angel on this one. There's a fine line between kidding around and being downright insulting, and you haven't quite got the balance right. Better luck Next Time!
Re: Wise Clogg! by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	8-Sep-02/3:24 PM
I don't believe there are so many negative votes on this. It couldn't possibly offend the sensitive sensibilities of a teenage girl.
Re: Leaf on the wind by troll454	10-Sep-02/2:03 PM
Besides the obvious, rather unremarkable final two lines, I don't see that this poem has anything to recommend it. Presumably the high votes are due to its emotional subject, but banal writing cannot stand up on its subject matter.
Re: Putney at Low Tide by Christof	11-Sep-02/8:59 AM
The language seems a little too pretty for Putney; but that doesn't take away too much.
Re: The Writing Life by poetandknowit	11-Sep-02/9:30 AM
Unllllucky.
Re: 9/11 by dougsoderstrom	11-Sep-02/11:47 AM
nice non-haiku.
Re: Life's Great Irony by Tascobar	12-Sep-02/12:52 PM
'he was called a spack / behind his back'. smooth.
Re: 9/11 by dougsoderstrom	13-Sep-02/1:19 PM
doug, I am astounded at your ability to respond to points that were never made. Perhaps if you were more willing to consider criticism, people would accept your arguments; but you seem determined to hide behind the 'sensitive' nature of this poem in an attempt to deflect criticism. But most of the criticism you have received does not concern the subject of the poem (criticism which, I believe, is well justified); instead it attacks the execution of the poem. By posting your poem on this forum you open yourself to criticism, yet you refuse to face it, instead insisting that anybody who dislikes the poem has a problem with yor religion or politics or nationality.
Re: winter every day (Don't bother reading this) by unknown	13-Sep-02/2:15 PM
I have a friend who has a friend (well, maybe not a friend, but he knows him in any case), who decided, one winter, he'd make some money by clearing the ice and snow from people's driveways. His technique was a masterful stroke of genius - he splashed hot water on the drive, melting the ice and thus clearing the danger. Unfortunately, this boy neglected to consider what would happen when his hot water became less hot, and froze, and turned into black ice.
regarding some deleted poem...	16-May-03/11:02 AM
I see you've made good use of the Oxford Dictionary of Clichés. Good Effort. 10/10.
Re: Unmasking Wyverns by horus8	19-May-03/2:28 PM
it's great, and all, but I don't quite see how the repeated lines fit in with the pairs of lines before their repetitions; it seems they're only repeated for the sake of the form of the poem.
Re: Fit In by A Simple Poet 123	27-May-03/5:30 AM
yeah, no one understands us asl?
regarding some deleted poem...	3-Jun-03/1:52 PM
"we’ve been insulted, baited, profaned, and antagonized" "The vulgarity and obscenities are unnecessary" "amateur wanna-be writers who get their kicks by hating" "You are the nasty, horrible, pasty, fat, short cowardly little twirp" "every woman despises" "and your girlfriend’s ugly"
Re: AIDS Bonanza! by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	6-Jun-03/5:31 AM
I think, having conquered the realm of AIDS limericks, you should move on to more challenging ground, such as AIDS triolets. I've written one to start you off: I recently contracted a virus called AIDS from having gay sex with a homo. Now I'll have to give up butt raids: I recently contracted a virus called AIDS. It all started out as a game of charades And now I can't have bum sex no mo. I recently contracted a virus called AIDS from having gay sex with a homo.
Re: this feeling by gmoney8469	6-Jun-03/5:34 AM
I see you've worked hard at making original and inventive rhymes: mind mine mine mine time good work. 10.