Forbidden Love

Member since 2002 · Posted 4 Sep 2002 · Edited 5 Sep 2002 · 7 comments

I dreamed of you again. You haunt my sleep. My private ghost you are, sent here to keep me up till I'm so tired I cannot tell if I am still alive or gone to hell. I know you're forbidden - it makes it worse to know my heart's desire holds such a curse. I love you, truly - you're all I need - but never these emotions may I heed. Forbidden love! Why must it be that you, my love, are denied to me? Why? Why am I marked a doomed man by fate? Why must burgers make me put on weight?

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[6] <~> 4-Sep-02/9:03 PM Reply

i think i'm in forbidden love!

[7] Christof 6-Sep-02/7:59 AM Reply

Normally I quite like bathos but the last line here is just a step too far. But this is pretty darn good

[6] horus8 6-Sep-02/11:29 AM Reply

Why must the hamburgular tickle my prostate? 'whould have been a better way to finish. are you finished? that is all.

[1] deleted user 7-Sep-02/1:33 PM Reply

its not the burgers pal its you !

[n/a] beakism 7-Sep-02/3:39 PM Reply

come on, deidre, write a poem. I want to write long, abusive comments. I want to vote zero. I want to write poems about how ugly and talentless you are. so hurry up.

[8] god'swife 11-Sep-02/10:10 AM Reply

This poem was awful, til the end. Then it became very funny. Thanks for pulling me in.

[n/a] beakism › god'swife 11-Sep-02/10:34 AM Reply

The pleasure is all mine.