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The Writing Life (Haiku) by poetandknowit #3
deadline on Tuesday
neighbor mows and weed whacks lawn
again and again
Up the ladder:
What's love?
Down the ladder:
Father worked Nights, Thats why I am fucked up
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 4.428571
Posted: September 9, 2002 9:01 PM PDT; Last modified: September 9, 2002 9:32 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.4299846 Overall Rank: 12924 Comments:
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and measures you by the fact that your lawn's not edged...right? this made me laugh. these are the neighbors i grow my dandelions for, p&k.
Writers Block? Pesky neighbor. I bet you'd like to blow a hole through him large enought to accommodate a view.(or a small toddler).
Very funny, a real snapshot of life as we all too disturbingly know it
Jeez i wanted to be nasty, but you jus to good. Well hell don't ye just scrape the skin of a lime revealing all thats inside. Yo knows how it is, and yo tells like it is!
ppfft
Winged doilie? Why the pfft?
It was a ppfft, not a pfft. I was ppffting at my last comment.
I like it better when you are nasty and fill my poems with 0s. Just like Frass.
Oh dear didn't you remember to read between the lines mark? I was being, so now you'll feel better won't you? won't you? I wouldn't ever give you a 0 though winestain u Jus to damn good.
Unllllucky.
I feel that the "#3" really adds a true taste of the writer's life. Excellent work.
Now who's commenting at the same time as other people? Go on. Tell me.
I think the 3 is really quite significant and if you were really a master of symbolism you would see that this is a deep personal masterpiece. That is all I know how to write, perfect poems, it is in my blood. And Beaker, what the hell does that mean. Make a better comment when you finally read genius.
I'm not quite sure if you're being ironic. Whether or not you are, I think my comment was perfectly suited. You have to say 'unlucky' with proper emphasis on the 'l' and a smug chuckle during the 'ucky', rasing your eyebrows throughout; that way, you get the strongest feeling of 'I'm pissed off and you're pissing me off even more so now I'm going to break your face'.
#3
deadline is today neighbor oils breasts and sun bathes over and over.
ummmm no
huh?
yes of course!
I finished your portrait but it's on my computer at home so now you'll never see it. This sucks. Seen it before. Haven't you??
don't fucking care doesn't say anything seen it before didn't like it then why now?
http://www.salon.com/media/1998/09/01med I think you will appreciate this. Every good writer ultimately needs and editor. Even Stan rice had and editor! Reply XÂ horus8 24.126.113.154 09-Aug-03, 12:46 PM Editors edit not theorize about the benefits of editors. Misses Peabody from NFG magazine couldn't edit a cantalope for breakfast with her staff of flunkys. That is my opinion, and if she wants to disagree she can put her writing and editing where her mouth is, because I have yet to see any literature that would contrast my point. As for the eighties and Lish? Who gives a fuck. And as for Stan Rice... Ha ha! You care more about that guy and bring him up more than I ever have. Cheers. Reply XÂ poetandknowit 67.40.59.239 09-Aug-03, 01:48 PM Your right, you do not need an editor. You write perfect little ditties. Sorry about the declines from NFG. However, I bet you are declined a lot because no one understands how deep and poetic you are. Fuck them all. You are better than that and deep, deep underground. Maybe I was thinking different for a minute, but no, you are a joke. Reply XÂ horus8 24.126.113.154 09-Aug-03, 02:27 PM You are an idiot. I do need an editor you ass. That's what I'm fucking saying? An editor takes the poetry and edits it, sends it back to the author for approval, or any of his changes, then vice versa again until it satisfies both all parties included. you know that as well as I do. When you have a board of editors half of which can't write, and ALL contradicting each other's suggestions while even unaware that they're doing that? I mean give me a break... Ha ha, Oh and through the entire process the poet is called on to do the actual editing via vague contradictory suggestions? I believe that to be a joke. I need an editor that edits. You are a joke Mrs. Peabody, not I. So let's review. I need an editor. I love editors, but only editors that indeed 'edit'. If you think for a moment Lish edited from the phone verbally, or by offering his writers a one sentence critique you my friend are the joke because, that man wrote while 'editing', he made the appropriate changes, okayed it with the author in question, and then sent it through. You are a lazy idiot to think otherwise, not that I didn't know that already Senior asswear. Reply XÂ horus8 24.126.113.154 09-Aug-03, 02:34 PM Oh, and by the way, fuck you. Your poetry sucks. Rest assured in knowing it's not about who's better than who, or "underground" or any of that shit you fucking pretentious jealous twit. It's about the art form and the magic of story telling... You fucking think I care so much about image, and you couldn't be farther from the heart. Any day any time any where you say when, and I will put your argument in the trash can where it belongs along with your contrived selfish agenda. Poet and Knowit? Yeah, how fucking ridiculous does that user name sound, and you call me a joke. HA! 234 view(s)
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