Re: Joshua by Bachus	25-Apr-03/11:46 AM
very good The sentiment matches the sound of the poem well, flows like a lucid confession
Re: Lovers Game by scitz	25-Apr-03/11:43 AM
This is awful hard work to read Some nice images, some surreal images plenty of creative energy
Re: Fighting erosion by INTRANSIT	23-Apr-03/10:20 AM
good rhyming I think this is key to this kind of writing
Re: spring by <~>	23-Apr-03/10:15 AM
I don't quite get its meaning, still i don't care much for meaning words are only an analog this could mean a million things all good
Re: For my wife by INTRANSIT	22-Apr-03/10:55 AM
Lead in with gentle cliches then bang ' a placid pool' really makes this short poem
Re: Truth in Lies by BleedingRose	22-Apr-03/10:49 AM
not sure i'm convinced, but quite clever nevertheless
Re: Blackbird & the Everlasting Dream by Ranger	19-Apr-03/10:07 AM
Yes I like the rhythm and the sudden stops in it Quite creative
Re: visual erotic by princesszoe	16-Apr-03/11:46 AM
nice original use of language but at times a bit distant
Re: Lost and found by INTRANSIT	16-Apr-03/11:43 AM
Cute, short and too the point I'll give you a 7 but its nearing an eight I guess poemranker must be a bit congested as im the first to rank this
Re: Februarys mother by INTRANSIT	11-Apr-03/10:38 AM
Nice, cant pick any faults Maybe a bit short I think a killer line might make this poem, I hope you find one
Re: Unrequited Requital by OneFingerAnswer	11-Apr-03/10:30 AM
vilanelles are difficult to master this flows well No mean feat
Re: a comment on Down Lovers Lane by Mr Pig	9-Apr-03/12:17 PM
po-etand knowit dandelions are not out of place on a 'lane' and dandelion fairies are the seeds we used to blow when we were younger with laughter ..... Do you remember laughter dark angel i know turn to rust refers to the moon turning rust coloured but why would it do that had it gorged on its own cheese? Anyway these were two very small points in the poem anyway ta ta
Re: Fraternity hazing the sheepdog by horus8	8-Apr-03/11:26 AM
like the lamb stood dead line perversely fun imagery excellent
Re: Down Lovers Lane by Mr Pig	8-Apr-03/11:22 AM
good wordplay as ever great flow A few cliches near the end 'tangerine skies' and 'moon turns to rust' doesn't seem to mean anything. I dont think the poem would lose much if you binned them. As for dandelion fairies, a perfectly fair description.