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Unrequited Requital (Villanelle) by OneFingerAnswer
The same mistake, twice now made "Everything will be ok" "With time the pain will fade" I thought the price was paid I didn't think it could be this way The same mistake, twice now made Looking back, I feel betrayed Looking back, what can I say? "With time the pain will fade" Pricked without a point, cut without a blade Lulled then shaken by your sway The same mistake, now twice made Stuck now, where we laid That lonely bed was sanctuary yesterday "With time the pain will fade" Poker hand of hearts, ruined by a spade The loss of chips is part of the play The same mistake, now twice made "With time the pain will fade"

Up the ladder: Love
Down the ladder: Whose God?

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.0
Weighted score: 5.2689414
Overall Rank: 3871
Posted: April 11, 2003 10:27 AM PDT; Last modified: April 11, 2003 10:27 AM PDT
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[8] richa @ 195.92.168.172 | 11-Apr-03/10:30 AM | Reply
vilanelles are difficult to master
this flows well
No mean feat
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