Re: The windshield-wiper blues by INTRANSIT	18-May-03/7:26 AM
i don't think this is a complete fuck up, I quite like the repetition and humour
Re: The windshield-wiper blues by INTRANSIT	18-May-03/7:26 AM
i don't think this is a complete fuck up, I quite like the repetition and humour
Re: The windshield-wiper blues by INTRANSIT	18-May-03/7:26 AM
i don't think this is a complete fuck up, I quite like the repetition and humour
Re: Goldfish in his little bowl by daniella	18-May-03/7:25 AM
you are one of the writers who is not as well known as top ones such as mr pig and zzinnia but your poems stand out from most of the pack. As for this its use of language is beautiful and as a poem is complete
Re: Darkness ( A tribute to the poem FOOTPRINTS) by Mr Pig	17-May-03/1:19 PM
some nice turns of phrase 'solace of my echoes' and half rhymes like abyss and peace But I think it is quite prose like in parts and perhaps needs tightening a bit
Re: Typical Day by thepinkbunnyofdoom	16-May-03/10:22 AM
my favourite of yours so far, a lot to interest
Re: John Denver's hang-glider by horus8	16-May-03/10:21 AM
Such a diverse use of language, Most poems on here are so prosaic this is more psychadaelic and exciting
Re: I hope not by colndodg	16-May-03/10:14 AM
Yes, interesting question funny cute but the last four lines a little too cute
Re: Be Not Afraid Of Dying. by Mr Pig	12-May-03/10:21 AM
yes I like the tone of the haiku, seems to work with the sentiment. Also its reasoning is very succinct
Re: long time no write by New Life Drug	10-May-03/10:08 AM
possibly needs to be shorter I feel like i've been commandeered to listen to someone tell me their broken heart story when i want to watch the football A few cute little references though, i'm sure if i read again i'll find a few more
Re: I must be out of my mind by thepinkbunnyofdoom	10-May-03/10:05 AM
this is ok gently amusing without recourse to the usual 'funny' issues written about on here
Re: This makes no sense by thepinkbunnyofdoom	9-May-03/10:55 AM
Like the second verse, quite clever. and perceptive too
Re: a comment on Totem Pole by horus8	9-May-03/10:52 AM
I quite like bob dylan too
Re: Totem Pole by horus8	9-May-03/10:51 AM
Yes bob dylas an influence to me, like the stuff about reasons to live/ earthquake shelters/ pipelines
Re: all is yet to come (version 2) by brazen	9-May-03/10:43 AM
I think three is a bit harsh, this has some good parts, I like the little entries of folklore
Re: Insomniac by GekoHawaii	6-May-03/11:22 AM
This is a bit creepy, almost like a depressing nursery rhyme
Re: You wash up, I forget. by Bachus	6-May-03/11:20 AM
Confessional as always (if not of you of a character you created) but sharp enough to withstand it
Re: all is yet to come (version 2) by brazen	6-May-03/11:15 AM
Quite angry, full of feeling One criticism : little to anchor the poem to something concrete (pretty rich coming from me!)
Re: Lifestyles of the ripe and glamourless by horus8	6-May-03/11:12 AM
Pretty mental, I like the ending very beatish The use of tits, niggers, aids is perhaps a bit evocative by numbers though
Re: Hunting God by Shardik	4-May-03/6:48 AM
I am always impressed by vilanelles, like the bit about cant shoot dope and a busy social bee