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You wash up, I forget. (Free verse) by Bachus
Drawing you a hot bath I ponder displacement of water and wash cloth movements. Then I relapse as only a drug addict can. Tracing images on medicine cabinet's mirror. Heart and arrow forevers. Bone and dust vendettas. Spilling out of basin climbing back up slick sides When you arrive I mutter something about us needing, "new towels". Then I retreat, back to the front room. Knowing full well I'm a liar. You motion me to join you. I decline out of guilt and fear and love and space. My mind concludes To much weight. For such a short time.

Up the ladder: A Cup Of Tea & Company
Down the ladder: Being Here

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.0
Weighted score: 6.905148
Overall Rank: 229
Posted: May 6, 2003 2:20 AM PDT; Last modified: July 28, 2003 4:20 PM PDT
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[10] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 6-May-03/8:22 AM | Reply
rapest.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.8.101 > horus8 | 6-May-03/8:46 AM | Reply
If you find rape amusing, I strongly suggest you download the following:

http://cabinessence.cream.org/BJ3-5a.zip

Listen to the first sketch after the intro.
[10] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 6-May-03/8:56 AM | Reply
Is it only audio? because i wanted to see what i was hearing.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.8.101 > horus8 | 6-May-03/9:11 AM | Reply
It's a radio show. I would strongly urge you to listen to the whole thing. Then listen to all the others:
http://cabinessence.cream.org/
[10] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 6-May-03/3:10 PM | Reply
Quite enjoyable, it was no gangbus though. Gangbus, I feel is the comic relief of the future. It could save the planet.
This was very inventive and like I said, very funny.
[8] richa @ 195.92.67.71 | 6-May-03/11:20 AM | Reply
Confessional as always (if not of you of a character you created) but sharp enough to withstand it
[8] Ranger @ 62.6.112.56 | 7-May-03/12:12 PM | Reply
Yep, as with your last few I enjoyed this one a great deal. Really well done. 8
[9] http://mulberryfairy @ 216.195.145.182 | 28-Jul-03/7:41 PM | Reply
I liked "I decline out of guilt and fear and love and space." The "My mind concludes/ To much weight./For such a short time." is confusing unless "to" is supposed to be "too" and there is not supposed to be a period after weight. But you are right, bathtubs aren't made for two.
[n/a] artiphishal @ 24.141.70.45 | 28-May-04/12:19 PM | Reply
the luminous drifting from room to room carrying thoughts in tow. ruminating like a fat hamster on a plastic wheel........waiting for the right moment to jump off. and who ever does.

giving inanimate objects life is so feckin' glorious.
"medicine cabinet's mirror"...........all it was...was a comma but i felt my fingerprint on the glass.

j.
[0] Doug @ 64.12.116.140 | 10-Sep-04/11:05 PM | Reply
I'm falling asleep.
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