| Re: Now We are Half by Roisin |
15-Jan-03/5:56 AM |
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Like a Siamese twin. I'll give you an eight for this, mainly because I like it.
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| Re: ? by KYLE |
15-Jan-03/5:59 AM |
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| Re: Anchored pockets by INTRANSIT |
15-Jan-03/6:01 AM |
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Good work. Yet more references to butterflies.
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| Re: The Golden Rule by Quarton |
15-Jan-03/6:06 AM |
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| Re: A Hancock Fanatic Writes by Nicholas Jones |
15-Jan-03/6:08 AM |
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You could be Dr. Seuss-in-a-box! Liked the first stanza!
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| Re: Morning on Galapados by Mikius |
15-Jan-03/7:27 AM |
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Well with the addition comes the need to turn this into a metaphor for two lovers...go to it.
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| Re: Morning on Galapados by Mikius |
15-Jan-03/7:28 AM |
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Well with the addition comes the need to turn this into a metaphor for two lovers...go to it.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
16-Jan-03/7:33 AM |
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Erm, haikus have seventeen syllables, or so I thought...perhaps if you did "She rode naked/Wearing only chastity/Peeping Tom lost his eyes" then it would work-although I admit it loses the gist of what the poem's about. I'll get back to you if I can think of anything that might help. Even so, I like the ideas-I won't vote yet, I'll see how it turns out.
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| Re: Theoretical Islamic Math by Bachus |
16-Jan-03/7:38 AM |
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Argh, do I laugh hysterically and vote you a ten or do I think "racist American" and vote zero? I dunno, I think I'll go for "Do bugger all". Yes, that works.
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| Re: Old Man by keatsImnot |
16-Jan-03/7:44 AM |
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I met an old guy in France who was a soldier many years before. He spoke better English than most Englishmen.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
16-Jan-03/7:56 AM |
Um, unfortunately I don't like this a great deal-not sure why, maybe it just seems a bit like 'any other poem'. Perhaps I don't understand it...there are some nice lines, and some not quite so-"that suspended realm" is presumably a reference to photographs (like what I interpreted the poem to be about).
It's very lovely, yet the whole piece lacked emotion. Don't know, maybe I'm just not reading it right-on the plus side, it did make me read it several times, not much does that these days. I think I won't vote because I would give it a not-so-great mark which would be an injustice as it's nicely written. I think I should read it again and think a bit more.
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| Re: distance by Crakyamuni |
16-Jan-03/7:58 AM |
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Take out line three and I will give this an 8-it's nice.
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| Re: Women Fight Dirty by scitz |
16-Jan-03/8:00 AM |
Well it looks like you deserved this one!
Last line cracked me up. 8
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
16-Jan-03/8:06 AM |
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Sadly there is no rationalist proof that the real world exists, if, however you are an empiricist then you're okay.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
16-Jan-03/8:10 AM |
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Not sure what to make of this one, either. Replace the question marks (I know they're not your fault) so it's easier to read, and let me re-read this a few times...
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| Re: All you can eat by flatliner |
16-Jan-03/8:12 AM |
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| Re: the midget of humiliation by Bill Z Bub |
16-Jan-03/8:14 AM |
Ah, ya bastard. You sit down, braindead and write very fast and this comes out. I've spent fucking weeks on a poem and it's still bollocks. Grr.
10. Much respect for you poetry.
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16-Jan-03/8:25 AM |
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Hilarious. Just hilarious.
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| Re: Unmasking Wyverns by horus8 |
17-Jan-03/4:55 AM |
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This is magnificent, sir. Many congratulations to you! I will hereby grant you a nine and stop this strangely pretentious speech of mine etc. etc.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
17-Jan-03/4:59 AM |
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Be careful how you apply the pain mind you...I'm sure you know the one about the bloke in the shed...the nails in his foreskin...the cup of coke...the rats...*shudder*
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