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Anchored pockets

Member since 2002 · Posted 14 Jan 2003 · 6 comments

I have become wealthy thusly becoming lazy looking to my future I view it quite hazy. The butterfly passes and I cannot disprove the butterfly dances it cannot make me move.

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[n/a] poetandknowit 14-Jan-03/11:18 PM Reply

Another adverbial clause. They are everywhere. You know, Intransit, I am proud of you. You are up to 13 poems now and have yet to pull them all off.

[n/a] INTRANSIT › poetandknowit 15-Jan-03/7:00 AM Reply

Thank you. I've realised that fewer poems with more effort is a worthwhile endeavor. This piece however seems to have flopped.
win some lose some. Could I get some thoughts on "eskimo", please.

[n/a] Ranger 15-Jan-03/6:01 AM Reply

Good work. Yet more references to butterflies.

[n/a] <~> 15-Jan-03/10:36 PM Reply

if you change the 2nd line to this:
thus becoming lazy

and the last to this:
but it won't make me move.

your rhyming will be easier on the brain, and your meter on the ear.

[n/a] <~> 15-Jan-03/10:43 PM Reply

dammit. why is no one ever awake when i am?

[7] Katzclear 23-Nov-03/5:29 PM Reply

What the hell am I missing here??