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Anchored pockets (Free verse) by INTRANSIT I have become wealthy
thusly becoming lazy
looking to my future
I view it quite hazy.
The butterfly passes
and I cannot disprove
the butterfly dances
it cannot make me move.
Up the ladder:
yet to be determined
Down the ladder:
THe Missing Piece
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Posted: January 14, 2003 11:57 AM PST; Last modified: January 14, 2003 11:57 AM PSTWeighted score: 4.8211956 Overall Rank: 10844 Comments:
Good work. Yet more references to butterflies.
if you change the 2nd line to this:
thus becoming lazy and the last to this: but it won't make me move. your rhyming will be easier on the brain, and your meter on the ear.
dammit. why is no one ever awake when i am?
What the hell am I missing here??
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win some lose some. Could I get some thoughts on "eskimo", please.