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All you can eat (Free verse) by flatliner
I've eaten from the endless self-pity platter it doesn't fill me but it does sustain me, I like how it feels, being sad. I know it's time to leave this buffet, but it's a good value, what a deal, so I'll stay another round. Heaping it high I lean back and feel the weight of self indulgence. There is a price to pay for this, but I don't have a coupon handy. It's last call at the dessert bar, so I sprinkle some miss yous', (I mean cashews) and ask for a to go box. It's a good value, what a deal, but I can't stay another round.

Up the ladder: ny road trip
Down the ladder: Together Forever

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.5
Weighted score: 5.0596013
Overall Rank: 6667
Posted: January 16, 2003 8:10 AM PST; Last modified: January 16, 2003 8:10 AM PST
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Comments:
[8] Ranger @ 212.219.142.161 | 16-Jan-03/8:12 AM | Reply
Good.
[7] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 | 16-Jan-03/11:32 AM | Reply
Solid enough.
[n/a] poetandknowit @ 67.40.59.250 | 16-Jan-03/1:51 PM | Reply
You also have a poem called "overweight." Are you fat? I weigh 316 pounds and have to buy two seats when I fly American Airlines. Anyway, I like the title and was excited to read the poem, but was a bit disappointed how you used the extended metaphor. So much for bringing expectations to something.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.212.215 > poetandknowit | 16-Jan-03/1:51 PM | Reply
Your sporadic flirting with obesity makes me hot.
[n/a] poetandknowit @ 67.40.59.250 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 16-Jan-03/1:55 PM | Reply
I'm eating pork rinds and doughnuts, glazed with chocolate frosting right now, baby. I will have another two pounds on before dinnertime.
[n/a] fuzzylogic @ 172.164.56.104 | 3-Mar-04/11:24 PM | Reply
helps spark my appitite, but still leaves me hungry! like chinese food: fills you up for 15 minuets then bam your starving
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