on you will feel by nentwined
28 Mar 2003, 8:42 AM
Scenes of full metal jacket emerged
on some deleted poem
26 Mar 2003, 1:34 PM
By the way everaiden, nice job on the poem.
on Temptation In Genesis by scitz
1 Apr 2003, 10:18 AM
Found this hard PAKI. I have done the 5-7-5 thing and I wouldn't exactly say I was looking to say something profound I was just experimenting. The last line referes to the Old Testament which I find interesting because thats when God and Lucifer were both in heaven before our old pal Satan got kicked out for being rather handsome (amongst other things). Lines one and two were just set pieces for the ending, and irony and a possibility.
Thanks for the civil tongue, How would you do it please reply?
Thanks for the civil tongue, How would you do it please reply?
on Offence by Stephen Robins
1 Apr 2003, 5:40 AM
Moving.
on A Sepcial Someone by JustLin
1 Apr 2003, 5:43 AM
and i cant spell cheesy
on A comment for Me (Aj) from a hottie by ChunkyHunkyMonkey
1 Apr 2003, 5:47 AM
letterranker.com?
on A comment for Me (Aj) from a hottie by ChunkyHunkyMonkey
1 Apr 2003, 5:48 AM
lol
on some deleted poem
1 Apr 2003, 5:50 AM
stanza 1 = brill, damn fine
stanza 2 = lost as a brain cell in Bush's head.
still worth a 7, fank u.
stanza 2 = lost as a brain cell in Bush's head.
still worth a 7, fank u.
on ForMyFriend, Joneel by Luv2write
1 Apr 2003, 5:50 AM
letterranker.com
on Guess Who? by Nagi
1 Apr 2003, 6:02 AM
Is this about bushmeister?
it could be. 8 if it is
it could be. 8 if it is
on One More Mile by marvelis
26 Mar 2003, 9:00 AM
Being a rhyme obsessive myself I have recently calmed the whole rhyme thing down and gone for imagery. I think ZZinnia has made the one point you should listen too. I think your quite talented but this dont really do anything for me and I blame the 1st line, the rest of its okay but okay isn't what you do normally, is it? (6)
on One More Mile by marvelis
26 Mar 2003, 9:03 AM
Oh yeah, the vegas thang is all wrong go to Camp David and sell dictionarys to the democrats, do something about George 'Dubya'.
I'll pay you.
I'll pay you.
on Depression by stacylynn_3
26 Mar 2003, 9:07 AM
Liked what you done with this, it sounds raw and from the heart, that i am sure of. The light my friend is your eyes, open them and you will be found.
Think about it.
heres a fat number to hug 8
Think about it.
heres a fat number to hug 8
on By the way... by sk8boardandpoems
26 Mar 2003, 9:14 AM
waaaayyyyy to long.
try starting to write easy, short stuff
try starting to write easy, short stuff
on By the way... by sk8boardandpoems
26 Mar 2003, 9:15 AM
also this is subject matter suicide, delete it, its painful.
on some deleted poem
26 Mar 2003, 9:17 AM
quite funny
on some deleted poem
27 Mar 2003, 9:31 AM
Great poem, lousy title.