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7-Jan-04/3:34 PM |
last 3 lines really resonate.
as usual v.good/
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24-Jan-04/3:47 PM |
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Original and sophisticated.
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| Re: To those that would teach poetry by INTRANSIT |
24-Jan-04/3:48 PM |
Love the notions of being who we ARE and not what others want us to be.
A real archers bowfinger to conformity.
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24-Jan-04/3:50 PM |
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Never easy using numbers in a poem - you did well with this. The conclusion packs a punch
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| Re: Once the moon turned me into a hairy vagina by horus8 |
24-Jan-04/3:51 PM |
Sounds like the lost page of genesis.
The 1st line grabs and so the 8th
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| Re: Lullaby by Goad |
25-Jan-04/3:11 AM |
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Liked the way you vividly illustrate a poem. The part about the pigs ear was excellent. This to me came alive and kicking from S2. The opening 3 lines didn't grab me and I'm barren as to why. The ending lingered in my thoughts and a very well crafted poem - but hey what the hell do i know? 9
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| Re: The Punk With The Stutter by Joe-joe |
30-Mar-04/5:14 AM |
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I lost my father recently at kensington, was he wearing a green wax jacket?
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| Re: A Flower for Monet by Shuushin |
30-Mar-04/5:15 AM |
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Hat tipped - great wordplay.
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30-Mar-04/5:15 AM |
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| Re: EGG by ?-Dave_Mysterious-? |
12-Apr-04/11:41 AM |
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| Re: AIDS in a van by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. |
12-Apr-04/11:42 AM |
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13-Apr-04/9:41 AM |
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Love the simplicity of slate gray sky.
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| Re: Diary entry (edit) by richa |
14-Apr-04/5:51 AM |
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Agree with horus, the 1st stanza is quite expuisite in the way it is written. You are a fine talent richard.
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| Re: Truckers should not be poets by INTRANSIT |
17-May-04/10:59 AM |
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a welcome epilogue of mr intransit, cool - likey !
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| Re: Piccadilly to Baker Street by Caducus |
2-Jun-04/11:31 AM |
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Parts of London are almost as filthy as Larkin
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| Re: Bugs by INTRANSIT |
11-Jun-04/12:39 PM |
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Exquisite and bookmarked as a favourite 10
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| Re: The Carpenters Cross by Caducus |
27-Sep-04/9:02 AM |
Written as a paradoxical viewpoint that an ironic omen could have happened in the earlier life of Jesus. This sonnet portrays Christ as a man prior to his becoming of a messiah, and the spritual elements which could have hinted to his eventual fate and demise.
I am fascinated by the possibility that Christ as a man became the 'mortal ghost' once he transcended in to a messiah, when he died as a messiah he became the holy ghost in resurrection but in his ending of a man maybe we became the unholy ghost - mortals for which he died a martyr for, so he could lead us in to his path of righteousness and not the road to hell, the road of us trying to be who we can never be.
Road = Ro(Roman) ad(anno domini) road created by romans, path created by christ.
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30-Sep-04/5:29 AM |
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wilco has a point but it has a charm and resonance just lose the 'I' repetition, 2nd stanza's cool.
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| Re: Amputee by INTRANSIT |
30-Sep-04/6:46 AM |
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you crack me up. i would give you my left and right arms if i could've wrote this.
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