Re: a comment on To Leave a Trace by Dovina	18-Oct-04/10:27 AM
Retard is good. Even retards understand that one. Listen up, hywel, in case you don't understand this site. Most people on this site who insult others with zeros and monologues on how dim their poems are use many pseudonyms. For all I know, you are zodiac using a friend’s computer and a different handle. So, as for never meeting you, how would I know? You would know me because I am Dan garcia-Black. If hywel is your real name then you are right. I've never met you. However, you responded to a comment that named specific people on this site. It leads my retarded brain to think you are hiding behind that hywel persona. If I'm wrong, it's because this site makes one mistrust words. Since words are the building material of our poems, the people I named in my comment are doing a disservice to the entire point of this type of site.
Re: a comment on To Leave a Trace by Dovina	17-Oct-04/5:22 PM
Thanks for proving my point, coward.
Re: a comment on To Leave a Trace by Dovina	17-Oct-04/12:48 PM
They will say that Shardik, Zodiac and Robbins were well- schooled assholes hiding behind the electron stream known as the internet. Of course, it's easy to be brave when you hide behind pseudonyms and long distances. Give me the readings in Hollywood and Redondo, Venice, Santa Monica where Trannies, Dykes, Blacks, Whites (And the occasional straight poet) will get booed off stage because they suck. There is honesty. Honesty is transitory. By the next poet everyone will have forgotten the last poet's words. Reading in real time not hiding behind clever bullshit retorts. Any man out there care to meet me and have it out with an open reading or with fists and knives (no guns, it makes for short discussion)? Of course not! Coward's on the internet use a Roget’s to fight for them. I'm glad that Zodiac is hiding in the Middle East. Maybe he'll eventually marry a towel head and direct his bullshit into a marriage where it belongs. Losers outsource themselves because the can't make it in the States. Those who can't, teach or go to the middle east. Thanks for the chance to say hi to everyone on your poem, Dovina.
Re: To Leave a Trace by Dovina	17-Oct-04/11:10 AM
God! I hate hopeful poems. Still, this one is OK.
Re: One True Instant by Dovina	17-Oct-04/10:57 AM
OK, so the last line could be "The sure hope of his shoulders inert." Good poem anyway.
Re: a comment on One True Instant by Dovina	17-Oct-04/10:53 AM
U R SO Gay.
Re: a comment on Archivist of Emotion by Dovina	15-Oct-04/8:09 AM
If her broad smile lightens your load, be careful, my friend. She remembers one from long ago. You are but a substitute. Maybe. Smaller is good. Diamonds are small (Even the big ones). B-ig T-houghts in S-mall P-ackages are better than diamonds. I think 'Schisms' is a BTSP. Ergo 'Big.'
Re: Youth by thepinkbunnyofdoom	14-Oct-04/7:30 PM
"bunch of kids getting wasted I had a future but I misplaced it" Great line.
Re: Archivist of Emotion by Dovina	14-Oct-04/7:27 PM
Lose the 'but' in line 15. The object of the poem must know what's up by line 11. Why beat him down further with your but?
Re: Schisms by Dovina	14-Oct-04/7:18 PM
Big
Re: Many Thanks by Dovina	1-Oct-04/8:07 AM
It makes sense if you're referring to back then. I thought you were referring to now.
Re: a comment on Amputee by INTRANSIT	28-Sep-04/7:14 PM
Sorry. That comment was so obviously lame. Good poem 10+.
Re: Amputee by INTRANSIT	28-Sep-04/7:13 PM
I count my friend on the middle finger of my hand that is left.-10-
Re: a comment on Flying things by INTRANSIT	27-Sep-04/4:07 PM
Just the info line. The rest of it is wonderful.
Re: Flying things by INTRANSIT	27-Sep-04/7:01 AM
Is the last line- "The red wheelbarrow" is a poem by William Carlos Williams- part of the poem? I think the poem makes more sense without it.
Re: take it easy by skaskowski	14-Sep-04/12:13 AM
Cute.
Re: Your Embrace by Brandy_n_Cali	14-Sep-04/12:11 AM
Shouldn't "the clench of my hand" be " I clench his hard gland?"
Re: Solitude by Dovina	14-Sep-04/12:00 AM
Why do we choke on "a spiral in Phi?" Pray tell, what does it mean Phi not Pi? -9- for being alone in your "phi-ness."
Re: Keep Your Mouth Shut and Your Gun Loaded by wilco	13-Sep-04/11:56 PM
Just knock up a neighbor's daughter. You'll be paying for that mistake the rest of your life.
Re: Band Ten Hut by LintyWeenis	13-Sep-04/11:53 PM
I can't blow horn worth a damn but I understand 'cause I play harp in a blues band.