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Schisms (Free verse) by Dovina
CREATIONISM:
In pews we listen
For all the truth we need
While the forest tells another tale
Unthinkable, unseen
Creation plays to an empty house
Colorful, beautiful
Appreciated, not inspected
Speaking truths to infidels
We pray for open eyes
Clouded dim by sin
Trust and obey
Weâll show you the way
EVOLUTIONISM:
In classrooms we listen
For all the truth we need
While the record tells another tale
Unthinkable, unseen
History plays to an empty house
Colorful, beautiful
Appreciated, not inspected
Speaking truths to fanatics
We argue for open eyes
Clouded dim by faith
Trust and obey
Weâll show you the way
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Posted: October 12, 2004 11:09 AM PDT; Last modified: October 12, 2004 11:09 AM PDT
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Although a pithy crumb to offer up to an altar of omni-knowledge, I would like to highlight that there is a word which transcends the two halves of this poem. And that I am afraid is the brogue. Neither the creation, alone, of a deity nor the result of man's need to clad his feet, the brogue typifies the grey areas left untrammelled by your fine words. The brogue is an example of the expedience of evolution confronting the glory of ornate religion combining to suffuse the surface of an otherwise ugly, plain shoe with the beauty of a greater more magnificent entity.
In summary I believe this poem would be better had you alluded to the brogues role in whole creation debate. I believe Darwin himself was a man clad from ankle to toe in the finest brogues from the whole of Northampton.
BROGUEISM:
In London pubs we listen
For brogue truth we need
While the pavement tells another tale
Unthinkable, unseen
Practicality plays to an empty house.
Sneakered feet of distance walkers,
Appreciated, not inspected
Speaking truths to peasants
To look with fashion eyes
Clouded dim by lack of blisters
Trust and obey
Weâll show you the way
A brogue can not be a truth, a brogue is a reality and in its very form lies its beauty conceal withered heels and Bill Oddies clawed feet whilst at the same time conveying a sense of beauty to those who behold the mesmerising chimera of its ancient patterns.